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Another cold reclusive night,
laughter fills the room,
sitting alone,
drinking sweet poison.


Reminiscing,
about her.
Been gone 5 years today,
the cancer,
abducted my love.


My children left,
never could look at me the same,
after the incident last fall.


I sit here, withering inside,
I'm known as a stranger,
lived here all my life.

Now I am nothing!
But a beggar on the street.

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  • Gd66uk gold member
    July 29

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    thought provoking and very good use of the picture, a sad tale with maybe a hidden twist, enjoyable read well done


  • PhantomsAngel87 Greeters member
    May 24

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    You have created a sad tale from the picture that grips the heart and soul
    I have lost someone to cancer so know how scary it can be and how easily you wish to drink posion
    Amazing write hun
    Congrats on the HM

    ♥
    Stay safe
    Love ya
    ~Manda


  • pinkheart17
    May 22
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    aww
    sad but pretty
    whats the incident?

    • Valley Girl gold member
      May 22
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      I'm not really sure to be honest. I was thinking some sort of an abuse while being under the influence. I just thought I would leave it up to the reader. ♥

      • pinkheart17
        May 22

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        i see
        leaving it up to the reader worked, it made me wonder and think about what kinds of things it could have been

  • Nakatrea
    May 21
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    nce take on the prompt. A very sad story indeed. Oh question what does noguest mean? its bugging me


  • ShadoWarrior gold member
    April 11
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    wicked

    What a beautifully tragic piece my friend, the emotion runs deep in this one, love the pic to...

  • Lucy. gold member
    March 30
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    oh, so sad. That was beautiful.


  • imahealer gold member
    March 10

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    This is such a fantastic poem, using many poetic devices. You also leave the reader pondering about the "incident". Thank you so much for entering my contest and very best wishes!

    Shana

  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    March 7

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    Wow... what a tale you've woven her sweetheart! Aww so sad.. makes me want to jump into the picture and give him a big hug!!

    Good luck.. this is a wonderful piece of art you have penned.


  • Poetic Tasha Moderators member
    March 7

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    great job, you really tell a story, i wouldn't have been able to work with this prompt myself.

    Tasha

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