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Mirrored Antagonist

Missing image

Sight poisoned minds
leaving holes to be filled
envy tears flesh savagely

[in composure]
she concreted enormous holes in her mind.

 

Narrowed halls she couldn't fit in 

[she barely was more than the wall]

pointing, glaring, laughing, whispering (paranoia)

all because the words he said....

                      

 

                             "You're too fat for me."

 

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  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    March 14, 2008
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    I like this one, it's nice and short, but it's enjoyable. I think you took the picture wonderfully


  • takemypainaway
    March 11, 2008

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    so sad but almost nearly to true

    no man evr deseves the write to cut a women down like

    this...

    very deep thoughts

    thank you for entering!!

    **kat


  • jezz
    March 8, 2008

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    this was very well articulated, makes me feel that there is so much more to life than judging people.
    thanks for the great reading material
    jezz


  • DD Sai
    March 8, 2008

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    Wow "You're too fat for me." Totally made me mad. lol. Great poem but made me think about what i would do if someone told me that. Great job.


  • Swan song gold member
    March 7, 2008

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    Excellent and sadlty true. Words have impact! I think you got that across in a very good poetic manner!


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    March 7, 2008
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    This is really good!

    wow

  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    March 7, 2008
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    you are obviously writing the words that I am afraid to hear from the one I love...I don't want to eat a lot because of him, so when I meet with him the week before I am gonna fast...but this is a beautiful piece, so haunting but beautiful nonetheless.


  • Simsboy
    March 7, 2008
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    Yummy in my tummy

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