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Words

Words live within.
Are carefully plucked
from basket of the mind
and displayed on tablet.
Each, a piece of the soul,
transcribed to express
what we are in the universe.

Quill is dipped into inkwell
of emotions, then scribbles
its meaning, small drops leaking
from its nib to stain perfection.
Lovingly offered.
Painfully endured.
Defiance in a syllable or two.

In a list

A contest entry

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  • luckynsincere
    March 23, 2008

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    Hi! I disagree with my sweet bear... I love that line. I guess that is a funny thing about us... we are going to agree and disagree throughout the whole challenge... lol...

    I loved this piece. I dig the creativity. You seem to really focus on your word choices. I actually like fragments. I feel that poetry does not need limits. Though I feel if used properly, it can help... depends on the poem

    I have to let you know a few things before continuing.

    At the close of this contest, there will be a link left in the closing notes... to a group. you are required to join to continue in the challenge. This way you will be able to keep up with the rounds and grab bonus points and so forth. Also, I will need you to reply to this comment and let me know that you will try your best in this challenge, and will give it all you have? Thanks again,, and I truly look forward to watching your work in this challenge

    Sincerely,
    Mel


  • Arkbear gold member
    March 13, 2008

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    Hi Wolf ~

    *Are carefully plucked?.....that line doesn't flow off the tongue very well for me :)

     

    Words live within,

    they're carefully plucked from

    the basket of your mind and

    displayed on tablet -

     

    Yes, the words we choose to place on paper are sure to define us in any given way possible.....sometimes revealing unsettling things about ones self :)

     

    Great write....lots of emotion to make me anticipate your next chosen words ~

     

    Fragmented lines are usually not well done IMO....but you have managed to capture a great Flow otherwise restricted by using all your filler words.....which I am not a fan :) ~

     

    You have a great *Show & Tell*balance going on.....and even though you only used 2 short stanzas, you did quite well with pulling some good thoughts out about your entry,

     

    ...well done,

     

    good luck to you....and your score will be sent to your Host, Melanie :)

     

    Bear ~  

     


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    March 7, 2008

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    this is beautiful you have penned the real meaning of words.its beautifully created mommy i missed your writes