As I go forth into the great unknown,
my life extends out along paths given…
Life flows through me as cold winds have been blown,
over hill and dale my life is driven…
All things must pass for with those lives passing,
new lives shall come forth to take their places…
In time some lives are shown not worth living,
others are still remembered by their faces…
Goals in life I have set forth before me,
along paths taken or so it does seem…
For as pitfalls and strife which seem to be,
our eyes set aglow with renewed bright gleam…
Let those paths before you lead as they may,
for within our lives we have come to stay…
© Jonathan Wikkins March 7, 2008
All Rights Reserved
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Comments
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Again you capture emotion well with your words, and leave the reader with a strong message. Very well done.
Rory
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yes many truths in what you have written here... and yes i love the Shakespearian sonnet... I love all forms... 'In time some lives are shown not worth living,' hmmm i have been one of these lives and trust me i never want to go back there again... I have found a new beginning and my love will help me thru everything.... I loved this my friend hugs and love Linda xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx
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well done
This so truly well done,I think that you really told this from your heart. I enjoy this read. Have a great day or night
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This poem is quite interesting! I am sure you may have done some challenges here on this site? Are you sure you will be able to make the deadlines and hold your intrest here in this challenge? It will go on for at least ten rounds? I think you have the talent... but I hope that you are ready for the challenge
If you have any questions or concerns please feel free to contact me.
After the judging of this contest... the challenge will begin. There will be a link given to you on the closing message of this contest. You are required to join that group... so that you can keep up with the challenge.
Thanks for your interest in our challenge. We look forward to seeing more of you.
SIncerely,
Mel
Also, please let me know as a response to this comment if you are "truly" interested in completing this challenge
GOOD LUCK!!!!
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yes, i'm up to the chaqllenge, as long as my chemo treatments allow!
mike, aka jonathan wikkins
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Hey there ~
Well first off, glad to have you take part in the Poetic Challenge contest.....and secondly..you're a cutie!
But, I'm an honest Judge, and your cuteness will have no affect on your score from me :)
OK...nice write....lots of terrific rhyming going on.....your lines were metered spot-on, and your Flow was really good for the format you chose ~
Lots of incredible Imagery in my mind as I read this ~
I think I would have liked to see this split into 3 stanzas, rather than one ~
Nice presentation....Title is just okay for me.....your message is serene, but full of powerful insight ~
Your style of genre for this write is amazingly passionate....I can see it in your Tone,
....nice job Poet....if you continue to write like this, you could actually win a Challenge :)
Your score will go to Melanie, your Host -
Bear ~
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good... very good
i like it
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great write my favorite part was
All things must pass for with those lives passing, new lives shall come forth to take their places
In time some lives are shown not worth living,
others are still remembered by their faces…
excellent write really enjoyed it.
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Very beautiful... A great tale of uncertainty... Life is definitely uncertain!!
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