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Suffocating love

You touch me so mild
Your heart is so pure
I cry every night
‘Cause your love is no cure

You just want to see me
You visit me this eve
I won’t disappoint you
But tonight I will leave

If I just go away
I know your heart will cry
But I’m all alone now
And just want to die

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  • xDisasterous Angelx
    March 7, 2008

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    I think it is really good. I like the part that says "but i'm all alone now and just want to die" keep up the writing.

    -amanda