Jesus...
I love you
you are simply lovely
you've created the loveliness I see
now I ask you
I plead you
to create loveliness in me
I would rather die with out a first kiss
and die without a true love
than to die incomplete of your good work
or perish without your redeeming blood
i can't find enough words to thank you
my life falls short of your marvelous call
but if I could look you in the eye today
I'd cry and say
"Jesus I really do love you most of all!"
hey thanks for reading, now please tell me your thoughts.
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Such a mature and heartfelt poem, especially for someone of your age. This poem is a refreshing change from all of the "love or death" teen poems. Beautifully written.
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thank you so much. I really appreciate your thoughts. Smiles.
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What heartfelt thoughts of devotion and love you have written here. This is brief and effective. Well done. Thank you for sharing.
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THanks for stopping by.
I appreciate your thoughtful comment!
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Let's just say that when I read this the second time it was good enough to make me think I was reading it for the first time...which obviously isn't literally true.
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Thanks.
It's the theme.
Christ is....... indescribable.
And I fail.
Those are two concepts that never die.
I appreciate your comments.
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I like the strength of both the passion and the logic.
It makes me sad when people say "no religion" in contests.
There is such beauty and depth in work such as this. Many are missing out. Not just on your artistic talents, by the Truth of Jesus as the Christ.
Very well done.
This is, as of right now, a personal favorite.
C
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thanks very much. I really appreciate your comment!
smiles, and blessings,
deep one
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wow!
this is really simple, but it is really deep! a very good write! a lovely poem that touched my heart sincerely! i'm too stunned to even speak.. so keep penning!
AWESOME!
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Thanks so much for taking the time to come by and read! I don't get many readers anymore. I really really appreciated your comment! And I'm so glad that you found this poem moving! Thanks again, deep one
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wow
This really touched me. it really sortof hit me hard... it's so simple, and yet so marvelous!
Thank you Bree.
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Ah, Bree, I love this one. I know how deeply you feel about this, so its sincerity is just so imminent. It's very pretty and rolls off of the tongue so smoothly. Wonderful job, my dear.
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I can't say I can relate -- I'm a staunch atheist -- but it's a really sweet, heartfelt tribute to your saviour. I'm sure he'd like it.
You might want to consider using synonyms for love/lovely/loveliness, cos they're repeated so often that they lost their power, at least for me. Just a thought.
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you're an atheist huh? Well that's very intriguing, I'd love to hear about how you came about that. Thanks for commenting anyway by the way.
Thanks for your thoughts, i really appreciate the feed back!
have a nice day,
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My dad and his family are very devout Catholics. My mum was Anglican or something when I was born, but converted to Catholicism, so that's how I was raised. Despite that, as a kid in religious programmes, I never really believed in God, though it got so forced on me that I tried to force myself to believe. It just made me miserable. I liked science, believed in the potential of humans, didn't think we were sinful, or disgusting, or had to repent for being born mortal or imperfect, because mortality and imperfection are beautiful...
I'm not bitter or amoral, as most think atheists are (and I don't drown cats or kick children, either
). I just don't think there's any evidence for god, or that organised religion is a good thing. The world's awesome; I embrace that.
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ah, I see. I can understand your line of thinking though I don't agree. So would you say that you approach life more with your heart or with your mind? What's your purpose in life? And what do you think happens to you after your physical body dies?
Sorry, I know that's a lot of questions. You don't have to answer them if you don't want to, I am just curious. and I find it interesting to see what other people believe.
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Why did it make some lovey face? WTF?
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No, it's okay; I'm used to the questions.
I approach life with both heart and mind, mind over heart a lot of the time; there are some things we as humans just can't understand (like the vastness of the universe, eternity, exactly how the universe works, etc -- all beautiful things to ponder and marvel at, no?), and some things that emotions can't adequately describe.
My purpose in life is to be alive, not just to live a sparse existence of "get married, have a baby, stagnate, die." I don't want any of that. I want to be a writer, and when I move back to Wales, I'm going to get involved with Big Brother/Big Sister type programmes because I think all kids need a role model, especially when there isn't one at home. My goal in life is to leave the earth a better place than it was when I arrived on it. There are so many intellectuals who have been wronged, so many people who don't give a shit about the world or taking care of each other. So, I want to help others, get involved in local politics, and encourage rational thought and appreciation of the world in my writing.
Honestly, I don't think the world suffers from a lack of morals; it suffers from a lack of appreciation. Christians love what God created; I love those things, too, and evolution and science don't make them any less amazing. So many people just DON'T appreciate anything worth appreciating, you know?
As for what happens when we die... well, we really don't know, do we? I'm not worried about dying; there are other, more important things to dwell on, at least right now. You have the Bible... but you haven't died, you haven't met God in person, so who really knows?
Sorry for rambling.
I like discussing theology, too.
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Your thoughts are quite interesting. No sarcasm intended. I am serious.
Though I may not be of the same mind, I am impressed by your tact and respect. You conversate quite gracefully.
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Thank you! Tactful interfaith dialogue is always a good thing.
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