Have you ever experienced
an unidentified frequency,
existing in those small hours
of slumber
and stress;
but still found yourself clinging
to the vibrance of that voice?
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I've been living on adrenaline and stress the past week and where I usually complain about waking up in the middle of the night because of my boyfriend is snoring, it's what keeps me sane somehow at the moment - lol.
So yeah...
Please tell me what you think
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God, Im so happy you and Jovy are still together! You think that u have found your soulmate? I have and that is exactly why I can relate to this touching poem. If it wasnt for him, I would of never got through all this chaos im my life right now. Beautiful piece sweetie.
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Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwe, I love you. This is a great poem. Short, but sweet. I can defently relate to this, considering I'm in the current situation myself
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Yes I have... and wow you say it so well. This poems seems very personal, but it's very well written too.
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OMG I SOOOO KNOW WHAT YOU MEAN!! its the funniest thing when most stuff will drive you absolutely mad and somehow the persons snoring next to you is the only thing that soothes you when you cant sleep lol i love it haha
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Ahh...
those questions that play on the mind and leave us to wonder just what it is that has us clinging to something just to keep our sanity. I know some of the questions well, especially lately.
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Blessings
Bel
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Personally I think it would have read better if it was "between slumber and stress" but I understand why it's "of".
This was a wonderfully fluid piece of writing
Thank you
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A case of oneirodynia gravis leading to oneirogmus perhaps? LOL
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Your metaphors are strong in such a way that impressionalism reverberates throughout. keep penning
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i experience this exact thing every single day, with my long distance boyfriend and the sleepless nights filled with work. i like how this poem is framed as a question, good job.
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That surely can't be healthy for you. You write brilliance still, even with so much added stress and sleeplessness. I know what it's like to take comfort out of things so simple, though for different reasons. I hope all is well with you.
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Yes, I have.
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Often I wake in the night to something I can't quite find, though it is comforting in a sense. I think it is white noise from the stereo when the cd stops, but I get the feel of your meaning here. This is beautifully done
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when the husband is at his most annoying (either awake or asleep) I do try to keep in mind that I would miss even the bad times if he were gone. to be honest, most of the time it helps
that's what I thought of when I read this
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What is with these boyfriend snoring poems? Is that all you're inspired by nowadays? haha.
This is beautiful. Since you wrote it in the form of a question, I related it to my own life and I didn't think about someone sleeping next to me (snoring or not), I thought of this vibrant voice being in my head. It was comforting and emptying all at the same time. But yeah, anyway, I love it.
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lol, well, lately, yes that's what mostly seems to inspire me
lol
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I've never been in a relationship before, so I can't say that I can. Sorry. With the way you write, I can defintely imagine feeling this way. Oh, crap! Why do I have to be so blah? Great work. Really beautiful. The word choice and the form is incredible. My eyes could dine on this for hours and still not be full.
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I think everything I've experienced lately is unidentified
I like this one zoontje. Short but loud
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It is the familiar sounds, the closeness (of that sounds too) that brings a sense of belonging and peace - even when it's an "unidentified frequency" that disturbs and comforts at the same time. Hold on to that, my friend.
This is a strong piece and a good example of how to write a poem that is both succinct and powerful. I think one day you're going to publish a book with a whole chapter dedicated to his snoring and the poetry it inspired in you - and I want that book!!!
~ Nicolette
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lol - I have indeed quite some snoring poems this far, though I really doubt I'll ever have the chance to publish them
thank you my dear friend
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Excellent brevity you've written here Mr. Leander. I can so much relate with the battle with stress and the pauses it create - subconscious or not.
'The voice here is strong and real'.
Thanks for sharing and keep writing.
HENSLEY
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Thank you very much for you most appreciated comment
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