Upside down on a moonbeam
delicately floating nowhere
streams of colors flying by
intermingling with creation
clouds of crystals
clearly etched
in mosaics of space
dewdrops of despair
evaporate in eternity
streaming sensations
splinter softly
consciousness calls
to those awake
Author notes
I have no idea....lol
just closed my eyes and thoughts drifted
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I really like your title here, dear. This one is so great. I really love your sytle of just letting go and seeing what comes to you from the ether! Awesome. Thanks so much for sharing this one with us.
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thank you so much 'Heroesrox' for such a lovely comment. I am so pleased you enjoyed my drifting thoughts.
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Excellent
Wow, a most unusual write, indeed. I think your muse must have been wondering through outer space. lol Very well written indeed. Also, reminds me of one which I wrote about the moon, it's title is: "Whimsical Designing of Space Paramaters". Here's a link to it, if you'ld care to read it:
http://allpoetry.com/poem/4105675
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Thank you so much 'Clovis6790..' for reading, the lovely comment and clappy on 'soft splinters'. I am pleased you enjoyed this.
I'll check out your link - thank you.
blessings
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You are quite welcome. And to you also.
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a very good poem
i know you are a good writer
please keep giving us good poems
take care
Upside down on a moonbeam
delicately floating nowhere
streams of colors flying by
intermingling with creation
clouds of crystals
clearly etched
in mosaics of space
dewdrops of despair
evaporate in eternity
streaming sensations
splinter softly
consciousness calls
to those awake
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Thank you so much 'Apreta'....so pleased you like 'soft splinters'. I think it must have been just a strange mood that day...lol...I haven't done any more like this..
..lol
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I really like this poem! It was amazing! Wow amazing Imagery It was soo beautiful! Keep writing poems like this man if you just closed your eyes and came up with this thats amazing because poems really do come from the heart and they should feel that way and this poem did thanks for sharing!
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Thank you so much 'Thalassa' for reading, your lovely comment and clappies on 'soft splinters'. I appreciate it and am so pleased you enjoyed this.
blessings
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Very much enjoyed this one. short and to the point yet still packed with a lot of imagery and emotion. well done and thank you for sharing this
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Thank you so much 'Weltt' for reading, the lovely comment and clappies on 'soft splinters'. I appreciate it and am pleased you enjoyed this.
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Hey man your poem is great thinking to open a contest for people without any gold and silver trophy
later please join
Upside down on a moonbeam
delicately floating nowhere
streams of colors flying by
intermingling with creation
clouds of crystals
clearly etched
in mosaics of space
dewdrops of despair
evaporate in eternity
streaming sensations
splinter softly
consciousness calls
to those awake
i wish you will make many great piece like this
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Thank you so much 'Apreta' for reading and your lovely comment on 'soft splinters'. I appreciate it and am pleased you enjoyed this.
I do plan on having a contest, soon, for those with few trophies - so hope to see you enter.
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Well,
For starters, there are several open contests you could enter this into, one on moonbeams, another on 'close your eyes' style and think. I like the piece myself. The imagery and metaphors are exquisite. I like how you put each thought into a seperate line, to make the reader read and take it slow, deliberately so. Good job!
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Thank you so much 'Jennyreb26thnc' for reading, your lovely comment and clappy on 'soft splinters'. I appreciate it and am pleased you enjoyed this write.
blessings
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A nice colourful opening with your penning here, a topsy-turvy gentle deliverance. I like the space imagery, the ever spreading chaotic design of the wild universe and all who dwell within its folds. A good stream of consciousness creation that whispers the mind to others with communication’s smile.
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Thank you so much 'musicalarithmetic' for reading, your lovely comment and the clappies on 'soft splinters'. I appreciate it and am so pleased you enjoyed this.
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For having just closed your eyes and let the thoughts flow you did a damn good job, this is a wonderful piece. I get an image of lovers floating in moonlight struck with sadness. I really like this write again you did a wonderful job.
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Thank you so much 'OneWickedJuggalette' for reading and your wonderful comment on "soft splinters". I appreciate it and am very pleased you enjoyed this.
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The eye closing and the letting ur thoughts flow are the best way to start writing. =] by the way it's called meditation. lol =P
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The way you describe things in such a shapy and sublime way of colors. Indeed soft splinters, the words are soft though the meaning of them placed together is so strong. I like this a lot. Makes me feel all shiny and warm inside yet at the same time, it's not darkness or light... it's more like a twilight feeling. Maybe it's the background, but the words just make it complete, like very very complete. -
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Thank you so much 'migit212' for reading and your lovely comment on 'soft splinters'. I am pleased you enjoyed this.
I tried meditation once - got my cushions in the floor, put on soft music, had a cup of hot tea, closed my eyes - my 2 demon cats came tearing through the house! - took me an hour to clean up and shampoo the carpets!...LOLOLOL
I like the way my thoughts just drifted off on this though - may try it again sometime..lol.
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What a descriptive piece of writing, of sights and sounds, colors and so much more. I love this kind
of writing that just flows with vivid imagery. great
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Thank you so much 'paullallady' for reading and your lovely comment on 'soft splinters'. I am pleased you enjoyed it.
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Yes, I do the same thing. Sometimes the best writing you can make comes from just letting thoughts drift. And this makes sense to me.
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Thank you so much 'AnimeElement' for reading and the lovely comment. I appreciate it and am pleased you enjoyed this.
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So visual, a very enjoyable write.
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Thank you so much 'judy...' for your lovely comment on 'soft splinters'. I am pleased you enjoyed this.
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I would like to be upside down on a moonbeam
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Thank you so much Genna!
I would love to be upside down on a moonbeam, too......sounds pretty neat to me.
have a nice day
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Well Lets try this again this is a great piece I like it alot and it most defiently should be on spotlight I am so proud woo hoo
and a million roses
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Thank you so much Starz for the lovely comment and the 1 million roses - I do appreciate it. I am pleased that you liked this.
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Really stunning...I love the spontaneity of it, the feeling of just letting your brain go where it goes and letting the pen follow it... amazing piece.
[stay sick']
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Thank you so much 'Sin City Rockette' for reading and your lovely comment. I appreciate it. I am very pleased you enjoyed this.
(I'm always 'sick'...lol....I just label it 'insane'...hahaha)
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Awesome......love the imagery evident throughout....what a stunning piece....
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Thank you 'poppa'! Am pleased you liked this. Just thoughts while drifting in the wastelands of my mind...lol
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You're lucky if you can write like this
I mean You're gifted because you can write like this! This is very tangible. A dream in its entirety crystalized in words, so to speak. At least that's what came to my mind. Good write = good read. Cheers, der Lurch
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Thank you so much 'herrlurch' for reading, the wonderful comment and the clappies. I am so pleased that you enjoyed this. This was the 2nd one like this that I wrote yesterday (or the day before...lol)....my 'muse' seems to be wandering off somewhere new...lol
again, thank you
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Lots of lovely imagery laced throughout the piece. I enjoyed the read. Very well done. Good luck in the contest.
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Thank you 'Kelli Marie' for reading and your lovely comment. I am glad you enjoyed this.
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wonderfulll ur opening just rocks if this was the result of closed eyes what happens if ur eyes are opened masterpiece i bet. splinterss wonderful wordsss
good lucksi n da contest u worthy of Gold
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Thank you so much 'Poetry-and-rhyme' for reading, your wonderful comment and the clappies. I am so pleased you enjoyed this. My muse has been drifting this way over the past few days...lol...who knows what I might come up with...ha,ha.
again, thank you
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I really like this one, upside down on a moonbeam, how wonderful! Good luck in the contest! sj
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Thank you so much 'sarajaneUK' for reading, the lovely comment and the clappies. I am glad that you enjoyed this.
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Thoughtfully done with a gentle hand. Good going. Happy trails
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Happy Trails to you 'davidwright' and thank you for stopping in to read this and leaving such a lovely comment. I am pleased you enjoyed it.
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This is really beautiful. The use of nature, with the clouds and the nature, brings an organic sense of freedom along with the challenge to contemplate consciousness and sensation.
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Thank you so much 'scsalumni' for reading, the lovely comment and clappies. I am pleased you enjoyed this.
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you must be a happy person I love this .
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Thank you so much 'Rheea' for reading, the lovely comment and clappies. I am so pleased that you enjoyed this.
I am basically a happy person. I hate being bogged down by depression and gloom - but like everyone else, I go through that also.
thanks again
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lovely write aboomer, as usual the imagery is excellent,
lovely words,
well done and good luck!
Alex.
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Thank you so much 'Alex' for the lovely comment and clappies. I think my muse took a hike and got lost somewhere in space...lol.
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This is great. A nice wispy feel as I read. I love the imagery, created wonderful visuals as I read. A lovely dreamy piece, superbly penned
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Thank you so much 'LadyD' for the lovely comment and clappies. I am very pleased you enjoyed my 'drifting'...lol
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A perfect drift I must say
The whole poem breaths the scenery in your mind, and now in mine.
You have captured this beautifully
Hugs Julie
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Thank you 'Julie' for reading, the lovely comment and applause. I'm glad you enjoyed this 'drifting' (my lst try at this).
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Aww I wanna drift off like that!! This is lovely hun... such a soft happy feeling to it!
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Thank you 'kiwi..' for your lovely comment and applause. I am real pleased you enjoyed this. A change from my 'dark'...lol
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wow this is beautiful and so peaceful.. I really enjoyed reading this.. a sense of peace that I wish to some day find and experience.. I love this so much.. excellent job.
good luck in the contest
kat
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Thank you so much 'kat' for the wonderful comment and applause. I am real pleased that you liked this.
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mmm sounds lost but found, sounds rain bowed, but sunshines, sounds floating yet fallen, a dreamscape a place I have never been!
Well done!
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Thank you so much 'Keith Drew' for your lovely comment and applause. I am pleased you liked this.
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you have really truly tapped into the
meta physical...I understand your poem perfectly...
I can give you some web sites...and this will make
soooooo much sense to you!
Write on friend...you are on the right track...and you are going to teach others!
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lol...I guess it sort of makes sense to me, but I figured no one else would have any idea...ha, ha.
yes, please message me some sites...would love to see them.
thanks.
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I love this!
As you know, it is my type of poem...you are so connecting to "out there" !!!
Write on and on and on!
*PEACE*
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Thank you so much 'islekine' for your wonderful comment and applause. I am so pleased you like this. I did 2 of these today for some reason - maybe my 'style' is changing...lol....or it could just be the bad weather system 'hoovering' over us right now...ha, ha.
thanks again.
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Awesome...imagery is GREAT! Keep it up!!!
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Thank you so much Az for the nice comment. I am glad you enjoyed this.
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Wonderful....love the imagery throughout this ..Im liking your "new" style ...
Rob
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Thank you so much Rob for the lovely comment and applause. I am pleased that you liked this.
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I love this this is great that is when the best poems come from if you just close your eyes and let it flow great piece
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Thank you so much 'Starz' for such a lovely comment and applause. I have no idea what this means...lol...but I sort of like it.
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