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The broken key

I handed you my heart
it has a wounded part
and its' key
wondering of what use
to you they'll be
but unfortunately
the key is broken
cause one day it was stolen
but he was fool enough
to break it
and leave it
now they are yours
let me see what way you'll choose

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  • creationsfromheart
    March 7, 2008

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    this is a sweet write, you need a space in the first few lines.

    also the stanza needs to be like the stanza on the front, if you can fix that then it can be used in the book and good luck in the contest.


  • Poetry-and-rhyme
    March 7, 2008

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    woww wonderfull simply wonderful it has a nice rhythm and your font goes great with the background gooodlcuks in d contest