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confusion

Memories live longer than dreams
Then dreams are short lived so it seams
Memories are reflections of past  reality
And you cannot change actuality
You can memorise your dreams
And change them at your will
They then become the memories
You can dream about until
You realise the hill you’re climbing up
You”ve been climbing it downhill

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JUDMC Prompt 2

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  • ItaloEtkin
    April 7
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    so it seems*

    good job
    very nice


  • mysticcrickette68
    April 6
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    clever

    Very well written, I do like this one...~
    Makes ya think too*. Cool~


  • PinkPony
    March 27
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    HAHA! A good up and down poem. lol Cleverly penned, good poet!


  • writeroftoast
    November 25, 2008
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    Good poem, good insight, an original idea, and I enjoyed reading it. Good luck.

  • Kitch
    November 24, 2008

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    i like! i like alot! it is a bit of a confusion nd incorrect memories can cause major confusions.

    good luck

    kitch x


  • CoundessaScarlotti
    November 4, 2008
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    I'm sorry, I don't know what this is a parody or satire of. You'll have to explain a bit more.


  • Blueskywonder
    September 25, 2008

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    Intriguing... i really like the mystery incorperated into this piece of poetry. Some say we can be selective about what we wish to remember which is kind of like mixing memories and dreams together. You have done well to incorprate crooked thinking into this pieceIt screams bends... curves. We can become delluded when we lose touch with our true sense of reality, interprating illusion conjured by immagination as truth when really everything is a downward course back to the source flowing freely with harmony... the natural way of all things. Great write got much to ponder! Thank-you for taking the time to enter my contest and good luck!

  • Acidanthra
    September 19, 2008

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    Definitely good ryhming scheme, the spelling was a little off in certain places, but I was still able to understand and keep my though train steaming down the rails. So much fact in this write that it made me look inward at myself to see that this is true in so much of humanity. You think your life is at its peak, then all of a sudden you realize that your fate was just waiting to head toward disaster. I loved reading this and inhaling it. Great write and thank you for entering!

    • judmc
      September 19, 2008
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      High Flyer

      Many Thanks for your comments on"Confusion" glad you liked it
      incidentally my spelling per the "Oxford English Dictionary" was all correct it wasn't couched in American "English"quite a common mistake to make, anyway as long as you were able to read it.
      Best Wishes George


  • G-y-p-o
    September 5, 2008
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    I like your poem, it ryhmes and is very meaningful. Well done!


  • Melissa Burns
    August 1, 2008

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    I like this poem It's very up and down feeling if that make any sense. Thansk for entering my contest good luck!


  • maralisa silver member
    July 31, 2008

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    Memories are reflections of past reality And you cannot change actualityYou realise the hill you’re climbing up You”ve been climbing it downhill wow this so deep and powerfully true I can so relate to your words good luck in the contest


  • RainbowSky
    July 30, 2008
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    simply; i love it


  • daviscth silver member
    June 28, 2008
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    Thank you for taking time to post in my contest. I enjoyed reading this.


  • SmartBrick
    May 26, 2008
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    Sweet poem!I loved it...especially the last 2 lines!Thanks 4 entering!!!~

    signed confused

  • XxKrazyBeautifulxX
    April 11, 2008

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    lol - iloved it. especially the last two lines...

    "you realise the hill you're climbing up
    you've been climbing it downhill"

    bravo ! =D


  • TillyMay
    March 16, 2008
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    I enjoyed the circular thinking and confusing explanation of the confusion of life! Clever and well written- and more importantly- too true.
    Sometimes I wonder if I'm remembering something- or perhaps only dreamed it.
    I hear there are meds for that.
    Oy.

    x


  • ShelleyA gold member
    March 9, 2008

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    A good write and very nice word play. You express confusion well in this piece. Good flow, rhyme and tone. Nice depth of feeling. Good word choice, alliteration and nice assonance. Very good closing line. Well penned. A much enjoyed read.


  • Bazza
    March 9, 2008
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    Confusion but organised confusion as there is a message in this poem that needs to be unravelled.

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