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Friend O' Heart

It's been so long

How was I to know

That loneliness could be so quiet

Yet, scream so loud

Echoing vibrations of sorrow

I cried this morning

Waking from my nightmare

And no-one was there to hear

So, I watched the rain out the window

Counting drops as they fell

I did not mean to push you away

Causing this uncomfortable distance between us

I needed time to heal

And time took you away

Making me wonder if time is an illusion

Robbing life of reality

I'm sorry I've hurt you

But I believe in your heart, you understand

How else could I forgive me

I think of you often and wish you well

I hope you think of me too

Yet, if you ever forget

I promise to remember for us both

Please tell me what you think

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  • bluecollarlove
    March 14

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    This was a really good write.A lot of deep thoughts.I read your profile and although you grieve alone you are not alone.I hope something or someone can ease the loss in your life.


  • poeticweaver gold member
    January 2

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    Such a heartfelt piece...

    You have a way at pullin at those heartstrings and captivating the reader within me, as I sit on the edge of my seat awaiting your happy ending.. All the best..

    Love ya, Timothy


  • di ivers
    July 24, 2008
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    just thought i would stop in seeing that ive not been around for awhile..this is amazing alot of emotion. there are alot of times that i push people away not knowing that im really doing it and you my dear have brought the emotions to words in this piece..thanks for sharing..
    ~~DI~~


  • vampiry Julianna
    March 24, 2008
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    wow this is an amazingly powerful write! it is just filled to the brim with this amazingly awesome emotion. sometimes i feel i push people in my life away trying to fix my problems and this write really caught the true emotions of that feeling. very well done! keep up the good writes ~vampiry julianna


  • ceegeeess
    March 7, 2008

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    accuse time and excuse yourself!

    I needed time to heal

    And time took you away

    Making me wonder if time is an illusion" Follow the turn of events and time follows your results.Thought follows negative result instead of preceding positive outcome.Things happen and time only can arrange the events in a schedule.Thought provoking poem you have presented sweet 'teardrop of happiness!
    Take care dear Renee.


  • Grimoire
    March 7, 2008

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    Very emotional and written quite eloquently. Yes time is an illusion that has a way of healing some pains but at times antagonizing others. Nice poem

    until exhale,
    Grimoire

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