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Visions of walls surround, with darkness looming in every corner,
eyes bright with fear flashing across hidden memories.
Yet pieces of me are emblazoned, in simple words, triggering a haunting past
where black roses filled the emptiness with thorns that scarred and burnt.
Every laneway yelled my doom with persistence, but now fearful eyes turned to sneers
spinning in delerium, taunting in tremors of aversion.
Sleep merely a fanciful dream in a mind too full of ghosts
and the walls close in slowly, slowly, as the neon lights extinguish.


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5)Alleys That I Slept In My Mind

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  • Treasure 5 gold member
    March 4

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    wow I could picture them black roses so vivid in my mind. Wonderful detail work. It was a real pleasure to read. CONGRADULATIONS ON GOLD!


  • Desire gold member
    March 7, 2008

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    Oh My Word!!

    Powerful surge of events and energy that grabs the reader within Your piece
    Love the elevation of voice~
    Marvelous take on the prompt...

    Congratulations on Your Trophy win!
    -Throws confetti-
    Woooooooooo Hoooooooooooo


    Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
    Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
    Best wishes too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • penman gold member
    March 7, 2008
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    Wonderful

    Very well done. Best of luck in the contest.


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    March 7, 2008

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    wow this is a stunning creation and a masterpiece for your words speak so much and descriptive aswell well done gran


  • Poetic-Theorem gold member
    March 7, 2008

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    Bravo!

    Yet another Masterpiece to add to your collection.
    This piece quickly snatches the reader...
    Love it...

    "Yet pieces of me are emblazoned, in simple words, triggering a haunting past
    where black roses filled the emptiness with thorns that scarred and burnt.
    Every laneway yelled my doom with persistence, but now fearful eyes turned to sneers"

    I have been there is what kept rolling through my mind!
    Wish you the best in the contest!
    Much love,
    *hug
    ~David~

  • Seeking Peace silver member
    March 7, 2008

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    This is superb, I love the vocabulary in this piece, you have certainly captured the prompt with ease and style, fantastic hun, goodluck in the contest

    Karen


  • Grimoire
    March 7, 2008
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    good luck in the contest.

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