I tripped,
I stumbled.
Now you are criticizing,
Staring at me.
It frightens me that you see me now.
Now that I'm on the ground.
My tears are flowing down my cheeks,
Melting the ice that covers your gaze.
Regret fills me as I now see the undisguised haughty pride burning in your eyes.
Burning a hole right through me.
Why do you hate me?
You don't even know me.
I don't know if I'll ever get up.
The hate that you've shown has crippled me.
Author notes
so im 14.. and this is the 6th pic
A contest entry
- Contest For Ages 14, and under ! by Kari.
700 points, ended March 7, 2008, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Just tell me what you think.
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wow different but good
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thank you very muchly!!
haha.. yeah. it's a little serious for the pic it comes from, lol.
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A dark take on the picture, well done. 4Th stanza line 3 is a little long. It could be broken down a bit. But overall good flow.
Good luck in the contest!
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hahah.. yeah I was gonna do a comedic outlook.. but then I just wrote this.. soo.
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