Remembering those old summer days when it was just them two
She was such glamour a model [but only for him]
From wasted nights of pretty addictions, to bruised lips from him
He was her obsession though he caused her much pain
Sour starburst taste from each time he came; he was nothing but trouble
But she longed for him night and day
She was drowning her self in all his beautiful lies
Soon alcohol took over never was she sober
He knew all her secrets as she laughed and danced under the stairs
Then just like ink runs off a wet page he left her there alone
He faded away in the darkness she never could understand
She burned every photograph from when she loved him so
Every flashback caused her such pain, this no one could now
Every scare had its reason but did they know the reason was him
Like a shrp pain from a piercing her heart began to feel again!
Author notes
option one,..endless-lover
*Burned
*Secrets
*Stars
*Alcohol
*Sober
*Wasted
*Faded
*Scars
*Obsession
*Flash backs
*Bruised
*Starburst
*Photographs
*Drowning
*Beautiful
*Pretty
*Model
*Ink
*Summer
*Piercing
A contest entry
- Human Shapes Burned On Concrete Walls-x by Dead Star--x.
525 points, ended March 27, 2008, 29 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
tell me what you think, no matter how strong it may be...
Comments
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Ooooh! Beauty! I bit my lip! All the best!
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Wow i think its very deep and very sad i loved it it reminds me of my work alot. Great write Endless.
Sincerely,
Lonelywolf Tasagka
P.s Thanks for your comment on
my poem Still Alone although you have
to read my poem Alone before you read
Still alone to understand it more, But
thanks anyway for your comment it was very sweet and kind.
Great write again Endless
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love this poem. good job
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woah babes
--this is a story that happened to me as well
wow.. im just shocked wow
i dont even know what to say
this has to be one of my favorites by you♥
*finalist*
Dead Star--x
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huh..thanks doll glade you liked it, it really
means a lot to me, cause your like one of the best writers i know so it means a lot thanks again for the amazing comment, love lots..xoxox
savanna
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last line- Sharp, not shrp
it's interesting...i like it...i don't like the format, that is, really long lines, but i did like the content and the poem itself
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thanks for the comment doll,
truth i did not like the format either, i like the idea of the poem but the way i layed it out i hate, but i am not to sure of how to fix it =/, thanks again for the comment much love,
endless
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