Day after day for years I pass by
You never seem to notice the sadness in my eyes
You believe what a part of me wants you to
But you have no idea that none of it's true
The other part of me is screaming inside
I want you to know what I so desperatly hide
I need to know that someone understands
Someone that will listen and not demand
Did you ever consider that I'm not who I was
Changes happen sometimes just because
Do you realize now that your different too
Maybe your waiting for a sign or a clue
But I'm not waiting for you any longer
Each day I become stronger and stronger
I've realized that I dont need to wait
It's out of my hands now it's all up to fate
But this is all something you won't understand
Because you fail to see the pain that I withstand
You think you that you know, and you think that I'm fine
But the pain isn't that well hidden, you're just blind
Author notes
Shatter My Soul, Let My Heart Ache
A contest entry
- The endless contest (or longest contest is more like it)! by Ted E Bare.
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Comments
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This is a well written cry for help that hints at the depression and pain hidden inside. It is also accusatory and seems to blaim your partner for your problems and contradicts itself when you say you wont wait, but then claim its in the hands of fate insinuating that you can't take action...
The value of this piece is mostly artistic and philosophical, not what I was looking for but enjoyable.
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The emotions and purpose behind this poem are very universal and almost everyone can connect to them. But you definitely expressed your specific feelings in a very dynamic and profound way despite the how common this topic is. I especially liked these lines:
but I'm not waiting for you any longer
each day I become stronger and stronger
That's so powerful. It really shows your resolution to survive despite the pain you feel. Good job and good luck in the contest! -
wow a very strong and powerful poem you have written here one is blind to see the pain they cause us in the short run and in the long run they will be punnished for what they did and what they do come judgement day thanks for sharing good luck in the other contests if you ever need someone to talk to i will be here for you
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This is very nicely penned. I love the flow and rhythm of the poem. The imagery is great, and it speaks to me. Many people are blind to others hurt, especially when they're loved ones. It's sad but some don't like to ponder on that. I love how you used that "blindness" to talk about a hurting heart, and how its so obvious you're hurting but they just either refuse to see, or are to 'blind' to see. Great job and good luck in the contest.
Josh
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I've seen that you've won a trophy on a contest. Even though it didn't have one when this was first entered I'm going to have to delete it. I'm being very strict with my rules on this contest. I'm sorry, but again, this was a great write. Thanks for entering.
Josh
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that a really great poem i love the fact that it just flows off you tounge and the feelings were very well expressed
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thank you
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frigging beautiful i truely do love this. people change and alot of times they dont change together
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Thank you. and for the other comment too
i'm glad you like my poems
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