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raining over cotton fields that never were

 

 

 

 

 

her ...
 
He is all brittle glass and bone,
jagged and small.
 
to sink beyond his reflection,
down into the hollow that is not empty,
is to find me.
 
i am also small.
 
we share that pause in the endless
between each breath,
each ragged little moment
cradled in hands
too narrow to capture us both.
 
so we swing together in the sky,
each wondering which
is illusion
and how this dance ends.
 
though, truthfully, each knows:
i rise as He rains.
 
him ...
 
She is all cotton-shaped skin,
formless and shifting.
 
to fall from her weave,
down onto the boiling stone that is not real,
is to lose me.
 
there i am unthreaded.
 
we share that movement, caught
between mind and dream,
between want and need
and, after She exhales me,
that space fills with guilt.
 
so we spiral together,
each a strand
of DNA
that never blends.
 
though, i do not mind
having never been real enough.
 
me ...

 

 

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I wrote both - go figure, the why should be obvious. It's okay if this doesn't qualify.

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  • Annalise
    March 15

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    I think it applies. I did specify to write from the opposite sex . . . if both are the same/opposite sex than it is more than fitting to write from both.



    BTW... I adore the dual nature of this. I adore this. All of it.


  • johnswails
    March 6

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    ????? ..... ???? This is a beautiful poem but considering the nature of the contest, I'm a little confused how it applies, but good luck anyways.

    One Love,

    John

    • EvilKate gold member
      March 7
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      Well, technically one might consider that it applies - if the author is in between gender at the time of writing. Someone like myself perhaps

      Of course, I am well aware that it might not qualify - but that's okay.

  • Faithbound gold member
    March 6
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  • Man, this is probably one of your strongest transformation pieces yet ... it not only speaks of your personal journey, but touches that part of each of us that feels the seperate strands of our own identity twisted into the threads by which we create our own sense of self ... or try to anyway Amazing work here Lady


  • NurseChilly gold member
    March 6

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    so quietly poignant and such honesty and truthfulness about what you're going through right now...

    I wish you all the best throughout your endeavours... be well Katie

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