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Memories of Fire

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Memories of Fire





brush strokes
paint my skin  fire
paint it amber light,    slow
as your fingertips


-soft as hummingbird whispers


gently trace the lines of my body

fire ...
beneath my flesh
feeding on the sighs I enhale-
turmulous inside my ribcage,
boiling inside my belly


-mimicking the burn of your eyes


as you gaze on bare beauty, my flesh

the night is long
yet; not quite enough-


never enough for all the stars to burn out
never enough for all our passion to dance free


so I will dwell in the harsh daylight
thriving on the memories
of   fire









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  • sapphireangelwings
    March 7, 2008

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    My oh my! -soft as hummingbird whispers....lovely! - the night is long yet; not quite enough- those two lines took my breath away! Exceptional piece that just sings with the melody of your talent!


  • motel silver member
    March 6, 2008

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    "... thriving on the memories ..." . this line really portrays the beauty of your poetry. there is no WHY ME ? nonsense. if one can turn sorrows into lessons leading into joy, than one has a blessed life. your work/life definitely has that quality. thanks, again.


  • CaliOkie silver member
    March 6, 2008

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    Ahh, this is exquisite. Your imagery is so pure and vivid and you create sensuality with your words. I like the fact that you never hurry in this poem, you let it spool out at it's own pace, the way slow fingers trace over warm skin, and you never push it. And the end is more of a wish or anticipation of the future than a real end -- as it should be -- suggesting future nights of a similar kind.

    This one is fantastic. Perfect flow and pace, beautiful imagery, and a wonderful sense of longing. Outstanding.

    CaliOkie