Thank you mum!
You've helped me all this way
Even when I was young and best of all..
I didn't even have to pay!
You're still helping me mum,
You're maybe hated by some,
But you're also loved by some too!
Thanks mum for training me to use the loo!
Mum I still need your help,
So please don't leave me!
I'd appreciate it if you stayed!
And that is how its going to be!
Author notes
Hmm, Not very good but I'm new to poetry.
A contest entry
- March New Members contest by AP Greeters.
600 points, ended April 8, 2008, 64 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Welcome to allpoetry and thanks for entering!
This is cute, the poem's rhyme seems forced though. What i mean by that is don't try so hard to have the words rhyme. It'll happen if it's meant to.
Thank you for entering and good luck in the contest
I hope you enjoy allpoetry
Faerie
Site Greeter -
Thank you for your entry and welcome to allpoetry
Quirky and cute. Made me smile. A cute little poem and a good one for being so new to the poetry thing.
Thanks for sharing.
I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.
God Bless
Tammy
Site Greeter -
Welcome to Allpoetry
Oh this is a really lovely write for your mum. Yes they do so much for us. It's wonderful that you have such a precious relationship with your mum.
Thanks so much for your great entry
Gaylene
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Welcome to AllPoetry
It is lovely to read a poem for a Mum thanking her for the little things in life she has helped with
Lovely write
♥
Thank you for your entry
Best of luck
Stay safe
~Manda
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Welcome to AllPoetry
Mums often don't get the recognition they deserve. As you clearly show with this poem, is the so called "small" things they do that mean the world. I think more people should see this. Good luck in the contest.
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I like this, good luck. It's got a good structure.
Keep it up
IF
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