Never pause or stop to think
Of what is on his mind
Trusting love, she’s on the brink
Yearning for his time
One she loves but love she wastes
Used as though a glove
Reaching out for his embrace
Wrecked then by his 'love'
How was she to know that he
Only wanted more
Reaching close between her knees
Expecting just a whore
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Great rendition of an acrostic. Powerful, and great flow. Alive with emotion...and sweetly succinct. Outstanding poetess!! And I also have to agree, that there are plenty of guys out there that are after that one thing only. Which sucks because it makes it hard for us guys that yearn for a woman's heart more than anything.
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this is sadly true of most men in this world. It is sad hope they will get their dicks burned off if they feel this way.
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nice acrostic..never read one if you can believe it or not.
this isn't really what i'm loking for though. yes there's emotion, and i know it. but it seems like dry emotion, i don't feel it like poetry should make people feel. and it doesn't really stick to my mind either. idk...
improving the emotion is the major thing...
thnx for entering.
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This is great...and i learned what an acrostic is...seems so fun. Very nicely done it reads well and has a good rhyme scheme and i love the message.
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quite powerful. great acrostic. may i suggest though that on the third line, that before "brink", put the word "the" there. I think it would sound better if you did so.
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Oh my, I clicked on a simple poem and to my surprise I encounted a deep, intelligent poem. Yeah, relationships are hard, especially when one expects something different from the other.
Exceptional
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I think the 'and' answered your question. Next time your not sure - just check entrants beforehand. But a nice little acrostic anyway.
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your - you are
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How sad! This makes me frown a little big! You are not a whore you are something more! lol kidding!
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