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Divine Inconvenience (Broken Tempo)

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Divine Inconvenience

 

We Is Me
Upside-down

 

 

 

Hold your peace tightly 

 

Silence your embrace with so much love 

 

 

 

Engaged in battle

 

To never fight fighting 

 

 

 

Sell your enemy an expensive alarm clock

 

Featuring snooze control, and forgive 

 

 

 

Overcoming evil with good are today's

 

Fighting words sucking life from revenge 

 

 

 

“I didn’t mean to do it”.

 

How about meaning NOT to do it?

 

 

 

Fasting & prayer is like Luther Vandross missing the dance with his father 

 

Praying fast appeals to instant gratification, dad is

gone 

 

 

 

Ask for blessings, but make a path.  

 

Why seek to bless?  Creates stregth & courage. 

 

 

 

Taker

 

Giver
                 Who wins? 

 


Call in sick to work

 

Conscience in, conscience out
                                 Heaven & earth can fail.

 

 

 

Holding out is holding in the pain, 

 

I smile with you laughing at me
                    Make a way.

 

 

 

“Who do you think you are!”?

 

As a (person) thinks, so are they.
            Keep your gifts clean. 

 

 

 

Cannot afford to?   

 

Cannot afford not to.
                  An army of oneness of purpose/ 

 

Monkey on my back?

 

Quit walking in jungles.

 

 

 

Listen.  Shhhhhh.  Listen. 

 

See your heart from the outside now.
 

 

Proverbs 3:6
                    Prejudice/contempt prior to investigation.

The all-important space between ideas
                      Between my ears/

         
     "Space,                           the Final Frontier."


Mad Dog of Manifest Destiny



God Damn

Make a Path

Author notes

Fragmented thoughts, I know.  But walking on fragments gets my attention.
Written November 30th, 2003

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  • Premium Mud
    September 13, 2004
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    sounds like me if i had 3 cups of coffee and started reading a book of famous quotes


  • Timothy Cameron gold member
    September 5, 2004
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    Thanks for the Cyber Hug (I define that as a release of heart, ie, a Real Comment). Peace Through Love. ET


  • pulsating
    September 5, 2004
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    I really enjoyed the little simple yet complex teachings you had to offer us about the ways of the world. The battles we fight within ourselves and how our minds are clogged up with webs and it is imperative to clean out the disposal and walk on. It just reminds me of Jerry Macquire or something along those lines, when the guys speaks in asides. I don't know why it made me think of that. I could be left of center here as i have trouble interpreting poetry but in any event the fragmentation is brill and it's a wonderful piece.

  • NotYourCupOfTea
    February 16, 2004
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    Too much in here from my simple mind ot absobrb, might need a few re-readings
    Of what I did manage to absorb. The contradictions particularly in the religious context stuck out for me.


  • April Renee
    January 4, 2004
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    well, its interesting...thats for sure
    what i got from this..i have no clue
    although the line:
    "Fasting & prayer is like Luther Vandross missing the dance with his father"

    stood out to me..i think because thats probably one of my favorite songs by Luther...other than that..im not really sure what to think..its a uneven flow of ideas...like two points of view almost..and trying to figure out which one is worth standing for..or im illiterate...i tried!

    all in all
    interesting
    made me think
    good stuff

    ~*~Blu~*~


  • wendy
    December 30, 2003
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    Trying to walk closer with God, but can't? Too many damn so-called religious people can stop you from be holy at times. Walk on and be strong. I love the various thoughts here.


  • HonorablyFallen silver member
    December 24, 2003
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    I love this the title caught my eye as did your name so i deicided to check you out .. fargments thoughts i know how that goes but they all lead to something wonderful peice wonderful!!

    sitting here listening to Pantera - this love and i fed the tempo of this to the tempo of your work and it was magic

    ....Honorablyfallen

  • -Dawn-
    December 13, 2003
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    Your fragmented thoughts ET somehow all managed to make one point didn't they?? I think I laughed right out loud at the Luther Vandross part because it was so....true


    You set forth your fragmented thoughts in a way we can all understand {like slapping us in the face}

    But we all needed the slap, we really did. We NEED these thoughts {so we can say them to others and I for one, when I do, will appear REALLY clever}


    Ah I really love how you beat up words to make them say what you want~~ unique you are always


    Wonderful writing, wonderful message


    ~~Dawn


    Edited on Dec 13, 7:06 p.m. because ''.


  • hahaimdead27
    December 5, 2003
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    wow


  • December 4, 2003
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    “I didn’t mean to do it”.
    How about meaning NOT to do it?
    got my attention...
    ugh.. lots in this that i need to remember to use...
    lots... makes me feel like a weak person a little...
    some people can just get right under your damn skin...
    ugh.. i need to make a path to let things go...
    but i wonder how sometimes xo

  • Flagrancy
    December 2, 2003
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    lol this poem really provokes thoughts...it's like some of it has irony and reason in it..i dont FULLY understand it but it's a great write..it does make you think a while...keep up the good work :-)


  • Blondita
    December 1, 2003
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    Tres profound ET...so much food for thought in this...the fragmented lines add to this giving each statement more meaning and depth - so yeah , like the format -

    Quite a caustic write by all accounts with some excellent pointers - all universal thoughts I imagine but stated in your own unique way -

    " Holding out is holding in the pain " ...this one hit me like the proverbial sledgehammer -

    I think you should change your public speaker role to that of philosopher

    ~ sonia ~ Up in arms !


  • maryannde gold member
    December 1, 2003
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    hmmm seems he played with this one again... more thoughts?

    Glad I came back for a look see....

    Mary ann


  • Manicmuze
    December 1, 2003
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    You can write fragments of thought any time you like There's a ton of stuff packed in this, so many ideas and statements, i definately felt all over the place and the formatting on the page was very effective in pulling me back so to speak. I like this, you got my thoughts fragmenting too

    Enjoyed it, well said,
    ~ Wendy


  • bec
    December 1, 2003
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    Bloody hell, you think a lot more than I do! (but then that's no surprise really.) I like 'i didn't mean to do it...how about meaning not to do it.' You can be sure I'll be saying that to the kids from now on!
    We is me upside down! (ish!) Very good!
    Enjoyed this...very original.
    bec

    (I'd love to pass comment on what 'X' has written on here, but unfortunately i haven't the foggiest what he's on about! )


  • December 1, 2003
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    Well isn't this just a bunch of thoughts that come to mind anytime of the day. Jumping on mind fragments that seem to make no sense, peicing them together to solve some sort of enigma that you have created for yourself. The thought of what things really mean? Perhaps the first act, is really the final act. Perhaps there is no act, for an endless battle that lasts for epics. This peice makes my mind seem a lot less busy then it has been recently. All I can think about right now is my love, why i'm thinking of her.. that perhaps love is all just an emotional thing, in fact I'm just trying to reassure me that it's more than that. And my family, my future, where I plan to go from here. My age, unidentified. My sex, -just a reproductive organ that contains some other hormonal side affects.. my race, a pigment of DNA which defines nothing of me. X, an ever changing variable that will always remain the same. X...

    All in all your write made me think and that is good. But I think i see a small spelling/punctuation error that through me off a little...
    "Overcome evil with good are today
    Fighting words"

    maybe should be

    "Overcome evil with good are today's
    Fighting words"..

    Keep on writing things of spirituality,
    ~ X ~


  • Judas Denied
    December 1, 2003
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    One quick little question: Should "frotier" be "froNtier"?

    I like fragments, seems like one big run on sentence about nothing that still made some kind of sense to me. Maybe it has to do with me being fragmented and fractured. It can be really God Damn annoying, but fun as well. If our thoughts were perfectly structured I fear terminal boredom would be what my death certificate said. Very nice, seemingly agitated piece of writing. Gut. Gut.

  • maryannde gold member
    November 30, 2003
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    Ah...and so as this was with him on waking...I have read this just after waking. I slept in... I have said it before.. YOU...have an incredibly busy mind, with permutations that are deeply satisfying.
    I enjoyed this...
    thanks..
    smiles and more..
    Mary ann

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