Perhaps the smile that sits inside
Alleges more than you might think,
Meandering as time goes by
Enticed a knowing wily wink.
Like sedentary simple times
A path is made for traveling
And if you never say hello
Life passes by, unraveling
And weary bones start settling.
Myopic eyes release hard sigh
Perpetuating vision blurred
Perhaps while watching passers by
Addressing less than would apply.
In a list
A contest entry
- March Acrostic Madness by alaskanamber.
425 points, ended April 2, 2008, 17 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Good stuff.
I enjoyed the subtle tone changes top to bottom of this.
Your rhymes are so natural. They seem accidental or coincidental.
Wonderful poet.
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Thomas Scott
So pleased you enjoyed this little acrostic.
thank you. ~Pamela 
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Nice arcrostic write, i have yet to try out this form and very much need to do so. I like the way you have created this one. Thanks for sharing and keep your pen flowing.
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i saw this was your name before i even looked what contest it was in or indeed if it was in one at all aye, a path is made just for that, for travelling down - a good poem.
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whew! greater than your self! so many self-conscious writes are navel-gazing
but you're looking out, and showing what you see.
Thanks&Praise!
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so this is what on in that beautiful mind of yours...a great acrostic.
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This is poetic bliss to happen upon!
What a pertinent message especially in these times.
Too many watch (on TV) the life they should be
living until existence has little meaning. Blue
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A well written acrostic, my favorite form. Has great assonance and tone. Rhyme and rhythm sings. I wish you the best in the contest.
Sam
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Well, this is just another example of your brilliance
and a very fine acrostic m'lady.
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Very touching and thought provoking.. "life passes by, unravelling", very beautiful. Although very annoying as it makes my poetry seem so infantile!
haha, great job!
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This is beautiful. I really don't know what else to say other than thanks for entering and good luck to you.
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Brilliant!
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Well done! this is awesome, the rhyme is great. I really enjoyed this, good luck to you in the contest xxx
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excellent!
I expect nothing less! I seem to recall doing my acrostic in rhyming form also but this makes mine seem
grade-scool -ish! l.o.l.! lots of luck in the contest, yet don't think you need it!
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:)
Life passes by, unraveling
And weary bones start settling...
Wonderful Acrostic. Loved the final stanza very much.
congrats and best regards.
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Wonderful Pam
I read again and it is perfect. -
wowwww this is the best rhyming acrostic poem i ever read good work its just greattttt
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A rhyming Acrostic woot woot, and a little bit of you written within it.. wonderful Job. Best of luck to you in the contest.
Love and Light
Frozentearz
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Nice Pam
Love rhyming poems.
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