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at the Edge of a Dream




Alternating between awakefulness and slumber
Treading softly between the layers of my mind
Turning pages of memories long forgotten
Hearing soft melodies of another time
Engaging visions that cloud each separate thought
Eager to explore abandoned memories
Drifting in the deep abyss of long ago
Grasping tightly to this dear elusive dream
Even on the verge of these rememberings,
Other recall crowds seeking to be recognised
Far into the pit of slumber I gladly fall
Aching to relive with wisdoms eyes.
Drifting further clutching straws from yesteryear
Recounting pleasures pain and ecstasy
Ethereal moments imprinted in mind recesses
All beckoning on the edge of some great dream
Making my nights the pleasure point of life.

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  • Sprite silver member
    August 29, 2008
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    This is well constructed. I like the flow and tone. I love that you feel that way about your nights. So many people spend their time dwelling on and mourning what they have lost instead of what they were fortunate enough to have. I love that you can dip into "the deep abyss of long ago" and come up with joy. I enjoyed this very much. It is lovely and poignant. ~ Joyce


  • tnk
    March 7, 2008

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    Excellent

    First of all, it is nice to meet someone that has also written for humteen million years. If the years don’t add wisdom, hopefully at least, they add vocabulary. Second, I usually don’t like accrostics because they seem forced or jilted in some way. However, I rather enjoyed this. All the lines are well crafted to stand alone but also merge so as not to seem forced or convoluted. A small thing but I think “wisdoms” is meant to be “wisdom’s”. I thought of many times I’ve been at that edge of a dream and now, as I age, the dream and the life that brought me here are so similar. The nights (and the memories) can be the pleasure points of life. Thank you, for sharing this poem. I have read it several times now and will continue. ~ tnk


    • Grannyrosie
      March 7, 2008
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      Thank you tnk for taking time out to read and comment on my words. I seldom write acrostics for those same reasons but this was required for the BA I am doing in Creative Writing . They like to see we know how I guess. You are right about wisdoms needing the ' thingy and that was remiss of me. lol. Have a blessed day. Blessings, love 'n hugs, Tricia