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she forgot to buy seed
for the birds greeting her
at dawn and at dusk
with songs which fed her
here is my soul
beloved
she told him
here is the me
you do not see
he did not
look at her:
if you cannot be
the you
I choose to see
then you cannot be
the she for me
outside in the rain
a dove
sculpted by forgiveness
awaiting seed
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myra
30.11.2003
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Written November 30th, 2003
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arr then poor man will wave away love if he just wants what he chooses to see, in love we get what we choose and also what we are given
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the lonely picture of a single dove...in the rain awaiting the sustenance of his peace...like a white rose that lies trampled in the mud.....very nice...Artis
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As the birds forgive, so must we all, and accept imperfection. This is a wise, and beautiful piece of poetry. But then you are a wise beautiful soul, and a fine poetess. Peace to you now, and always. Have a wonderful Christmas
Di
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The last time I saw a dove "sculpted by forgiveness"? I was running full speed through the forest on my feet sculpted by the baby Jesus. The dove looked me straight in the eye and said, "Have you seen Noah?" To which I replied no, "have you seen my firm buttocks, or car keys?" But the dove had fled upon hearing mention of my tight sultry laced buttresses. I alas, was alone once again in the forest with my poor sore bleeding baby jesus feet, and the thought that perhaps, I had sinned somewhere, somehow, sometime in my past. -
You have a FAN in me!
Artistic and aesthetic beauty.
Colorful symbolism used so skillfuly.
Nothing Much I can say , that has not been said above..yet I can say this from my heart..
YOU WEAR THE CROWN OF TALENT WELL..
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a truly touching poem, one that burms its message into the conscience. how guilty I have often been of seeing in someone what I want to see rather than who he/she really is - and just accepting and loving what I see. wonderful write!
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Such beauty in your words and imagery.
The last stanza is my favourite, as well. Enjoyed! -
Myra
This is truly beautiful
The last stanza is my favorite
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Karen
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well spoken
Ah, yes, the birds will forgive you for forgetting their seed, but he will not forgive you for not "being the you he chooses to see", if you will forgive my paraphrase. The birds and the other animals will most often forgive any shortcoming from us, yet we oft refer to them as "beasts". Methinks the true beasts walk on two legs, and are short on perception, and most certainly short on love and understanding.
Another beautiful write Myra, thank you so much.
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This is such a meloncholy poem, but very well written. I applaud the way you used pronouns and such, and the way you rhymed was very appealing.
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wonderfully creative - the gentle words are music in my ears - definitely a moving piece of work Myra - excellent work ~ brian
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I find myself often in agreement with Cinara as I traipse across many of these pages after she's had the chance to ponder them first.
The words in this really do take one in a twist or turn to find its meaning in the symbolism you use so well to keep us focused throughout your pieces. Again, another write by you that continues to leave others envious and wondering as to where can all of this come.
Another obvious piece of your talent laid before us.
Kimmie -
THoughts as only Myra thinks them, enhanced by simple and lovely phrases
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Myra, this is a tender piece beautifuly written but I dont have the perfect words for your lovely inspiration this to me reflects the love and molding of the Lord within....Like being who he wants for us to be.....in His image its about Him and not us in what we give and the willing heart in what we give like the things he plants of seed....Or sometimes the heart and not the gifts but they can go together right gifts from the heart But being loved for one is without having to bring something always material. Like just being loved for one is is the message of this....or being who the Lord plants in seed without always the money of material things. I know Im probably guilty of that trying show or prove that love to people.... at times of giving things away of things.....To sum t his up it reflects acceptance of the person not the things given or it always having to be that.....But also the priceless gifts of blessings the Lord puts in the heart of just the greatest gift love....Im probably getting backwards in my thoughts so ill close hope this is alright Ms. Myra? Love and hugs,Sherry
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Very sensitive. The last stanza really stands out. Nice write, Myra.
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To be accepted for who you are, and not the presents you bring. Birds do not judge us. They will sing for us despite our imperfections. The dove to me symbolizes inner peace.
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Beautiful and insightful. This was wonderfully written, though still quite sad. A truly great piece...thanks for sharing.
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it is 5 to 4 in the morning and I'm not sure what to say
except that the words flowed nicely and the imagery was simple but effective
hope all is well
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This is a good piece it is to the point and round about in the same moment. It was as if you wanted the reader to undersatnd something you didn't fully reveal. Your meter is very different and refreshing. The prose of it gives good structure and a musical vibe. It gives this poem richness and depth. Keep reaching out and keep taking in. Peace. Amber.
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f you cannot be
the you
I choose to see
then you cannot be
the she for me
> i like that... and i usually hate excessive pronoun usage in a piece, but it works here -
dimensionally good
the love birds seem sad indeed
is there a selfishness in their hope
is there anything wrong with that
i still fear forgiveness
but not mine
strange
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lovely insight and a beautiful write - thanks for sharing this
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Yes very beautiful, but also sad
I only hope the she did not wait for the he too long... And thank you for your wonderful insights on my poems. They deffinatly got me to thinking
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beautiful, very enlightening to me, this is wonderful. Simple but such powerful. Thank you, lissa
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