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One Whorish Night and You Lost It All

Soft lies
Pour out
Of your backstabbing lips

Lips of hatred
Tarnished forever
With lies

Unfaithful lips
Spill unbelievable truths
It started with one kiss

One kiss on the lips
That turned into
One whorish night

Your falsified lips
Tainted with sluttish action
Shall never meet mine again

Author notes

he cheated on me and leaving him was the best thing for me.

Walking away a winner, walking away from a losing game.

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  • City-of-Angels
    July 5, 2008

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    You get some damn kudos hun.I can't even imagine the pain you felt I'm so sorry I don't know you ya know, but a cheater wouldn't deserve somebody so faithful like that. I'm glad you knew it was best to leave him (some people just never learn you know haha) This is a well written write I can really feel the anger dripping from it. Thanks so much for entering and good luck!


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    June 28, 2008

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    I'm sorry he did this to you...honestly, some blokes just think out of their ---- instead of their hearts or head, which is stupid and inconsiderate.


  • CountryCousin
    June 4, 2008

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    I remember.

    I have a memory of my aunt who told a man before she married my uncle that she would not kiss the lips of a man that chewed tobacco. So she walked away, this is a good example of that.

  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    March 24, 2008
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    Teaches you never to cheat on someone, doesn't it? Makes me glad it's been a while since I've even considered doing that. The slag I used to be is as far gone as the little girl who called her father 'daddy'.


  • marciakay81
    March 23, 2008
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    wow...i really like the emotion of this one. good write. thanks for entering.


  • BAMFNx3
    March 17, 2008

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    This was really good, I enjoyed reading it. I could feel your anger pouring out of your words.

    Thanks for entering and good luck.


  • MzDimeDivia
    March 15, 2008

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    Nice

    It was nice short and hot i like the tension in it like when you said "One kiss on the lips
    That turned into One whorish night"
    Reading your poem again took me back i little bit more good luck i liked when you said Soft lies
    Pour out
    Of your backstabbing lips

    Lips of hatred
    Tarnished forever
    With lies

    Unfaithful lips
    Spill unbelievable truths
    It started with one kiss

    One kiss on the lips
    That turned into
    One whorish night


  • Ms Raneika
    March 12, 2008

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    good piece the picture is a mirror of your emotion thanks for entering my contest much love, Raneika

  • Withoutmodifiers
    March 9, 2008

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    At this point, I haven't read the poem yet. I am just terribly enamored with your title. Lets see how wonderful the rest of it is. I just needed to tell you : great title.

    5 minutes later after thought and explication

    I like your usage of repetition with the word lips, it really drives the point home. It is a really emotionally strong piece of work you have created.
    Good write.

  • nostalgicdreamer416
    March 6, 2008
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    wow amazing--short yet filled with so much emotion....great job :]

    Godbless....;]


  • sweetgirlwa
    March 6, 2008

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    Respect obviously is not given it must be TAKEN!!! Way to go, you need to tell him where he can stick those lips!!! Great work, Good luck


  • jcat gold member
    March 6, 2008

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    And you let him live????? WOW!!! You are a much better person than I am, cause I would have killed him and than disposed of the body in a most hideous way!! You go girl!!! This truly was magnificent!!! I love your choice of words....

  • rewritten
    March 5, 2008
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    I enjoy the resentment of emotion in the poem, the comparisons are really well done, and everything is tied into the lips, while the story itself is very vague. My suggestion would be in your 4th stanza to somehow put the word lips into it; simply becuase every other stanza has the word lips in it, and its the extended metaphore throughout the piece. Nicely done


  • Three Doves
    March 5, 2008

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    One Pissed Off Dudette

    definitely not a problem with expressing yourself and I do hope you recover quickly. It does help when you speak the words out loud. Thank you for sharing the moment. Best wishes in life and the contest.


    • Blooming Poet
      March 5, 2008
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      Yeah, I just found out the "love of my life" (at least I thought) got drunk and had group sex with at least 5 girls

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