Two hearts
Miles apart
United as one
The valley's between us
doesn't stop our hearts
From reaching out for each other
The oceans between us
Can be swam by our hearts
Natural instinct to be brought together
Two hearts
Miles apart
United as one
Author notes
6. Two hearts beat as one.
In a list
A contest entry
- Title Options Contest. by Poetryintheblood.
450 points, ended March 13, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - My love's birthday by Meroza.
425 points, ended March 27, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - "Can I Keep You Forever" by oldphotosonlybringt.
550 points, ended March 20, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - this is a contest of choice by kitty23.
850 points, ended May 28, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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title fits in perfectly with this poem
your poem here has so much emotion and dedication into i can tell
"The valley's between us
doesn't stop our hearts
From reaching out for each other"
loved theses lines right here!! It's a perfect poem and is really great good job on this its what i wanted thank you so much
keep up the great work
Kitty23 -
Judging:
- Title: The title is cute and it really do fit the poem well. And the photo makes it more special.
- Is it what I am looking for? Yes, indeed it is.
- The emotions: Its full of it.
- Wowness: Medium.
- Final word: It is lovely but it is a bit short. I would love to see more in it. But yet again, the poem is fantastic. You are a great writer. -
I love the picture it is wonderful. You speak good truth of your words. Love can be shared near or far. In dreams, or in reality. With them next to you holding their hand, or with you over the telephone. Love has its way to manage things, if it thinks that its meant to be.
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i like the poem it had a nice flow and was just good
kkep up your work sweetie, and take care thanks for entering as well and best of luvk to you in all the contest,
endless -
This poem is so amazing, I really did like this one a lot! Very well written!
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Thank you for your profound entry, I can relate to past experience so it hits home, good luck, Josie
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I understand this feeling of seperation, hard not to grow apart from someone when you are already seperated by miles, well done and good luck in the contest!
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Very nice
I feel your work here and know the feeling of seperation and the heatbeats that are forever tied together as one where time or space never is too far
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what a great thought...two hearts meant to be one will never be apart.
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