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Foreplay, Teasingly and When You Touch Me (contest submissions)

Foreplay 

 

 

Light plays upon supple grace

Oh woman, and I scarcely

Look away as your body

Occupies time and space

 

Your eyes ache to capture

My nakedness oh lover, as a

Child wholly mesmerized by

Magic and I see your rapture

 

Might I trace my rapt desire

Slowly, as trembling fingers

Venture wide, with softly

Singing, sensual respire?

 

Oh, needful man take

This feminine frame

That beckons you to

Sweet love make~

 

 

___________________ 

 

 

Teasingly  

 

 

Deliberate, is a brushed passing

of your hair, directed with

sweet, sensual forte,

as skin pleads

for more.

 

 

 

____________________

 

 

When You Touch Me

 

 

Exhilaration is evident

with finger’s slightest follow,

 

a soft focused breath can do as much

 

when passion has imbued flesh

with sensitivities as body’s

intent pleasure proclaims

 

“indulge me”

 

until lust demands to be

quenched but for a brief time,

until carnal hunger

panders again.

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Foreplay = 72 words

When You Touch me = 42 words

Teasingly = 19 words

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  • NewDay
    August 20

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    beautiful!

    i draw in the writing the love the passion!amazing work
    loved it and enjoyed everyline


    juliet

  • I especially enjoyed the center poem: teasingly.

  • The addition of your third poem makes this presentation complete. Wonderful interpretations of the prompt which take the reader on a journey of tender desire and passion expressed in a way that only you can.

    I wish you the best in the contest and look forward to seeing your words in print.




  • Cannonsfire silver member
    March 12

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    I do like the rhyme within the first part, it flows softly, like the emotion it displays within the words. Softly sensual and I enjoyed the journey through to the end. Love, C


  • adsaige gold member
    March 7

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    such beauty reflected in this piece...i was taken aback by the sheer intensity and sensuality of this piece. it seems that we have entered the same contest? i will enjoy competition from my dear Uncle Mike!
  • ashjoe76
    March 7

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    :)

    unique work. many unusual images in this which work out towards the overall effect. My fav:
    until lust demands to be

    quenched but for a brief time,

    until carnal hunger

    panders again...


    congrats!


  • michichoeret
    March 6
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    very good

    liked pandering carnal hunger
    and loved that her body occupied time and space


  • B Chandler
    March 6

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    Commenty/Opinion

    I think if you were to drop the comma after 'me' as well as after 'proclaims' that the emphasis would not detact itself away from the whole write. Again this is just my opinion. Now for the other half of my thoughts...

    I rightfully admit that at first, this looked like it would be something not tastefully done correctly, but I was totally wrong because even though the write feels adult, in a way it does not. Keep penning

    • MJ Donnelly gold member
      March 6
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      Thank you dear, and I made the necessary corrections as you suggested.


      mj.

  • Nicolette gold member
    March 6

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    Man...the title just drew me into this!!!

    This is beautiful poetry - so very sensual, the deep sighs, the cries, the moans of lovers touching. I loved the sense of adoration, the glow of these words....just like skins in the afterglow of lovemaking.

    And now I have to get back to work - if that's possible after reading these two poems, Michael!!

    ~ Nicolette

  • Stunning pieces hun!

    Wow... they just sweep you up in the most delicious of feelings!

    The first one made me breathless... the second got my heart pounding... both are amazing!

    You write these beautifully sensual pieces so well. Great job.. good luck!!

  • Oh my goodness, I think we need to have a serious talk to that child of ours, Michael.

    I suppose we can't blame her, your words were filled with such passion and longing. Truly beautiful in their sensual flow across the page. I hope you do well in the contest with both poems.



  • daddys being naughty this is a beautiful sensual peice though you can feel and sense the passion running through it...but now daughter must run so parents dont ground her hehe love you

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