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Blind Sight

My eyes like empty sockets
fall upon the nothingness
that surrounds my soul
Wordless speeches,
put together from the bottom of the abyss
cry out soundlessly,
into the void of lost control.
Causes lost, and causes won,
collect like raindrops on the sun
forever forgotten before they run
into rivulets of steaming flow

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  • loveyourfate
    April 4, 2008
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    I'm only going to say... beautiful!


  • GentleStorm
    March 17, 2008

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    great write. i want to make up for the horrible comment i left you in my contest. lol.

    the blue is a little hard to read, but then it could be this computer... beautiful imagery and wordage. Great job.


  • Selene Tremere
    March 6, 2008

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    really well penned,great imagery I really loved this : ''Causes lost, and causes won,
    collect like raindrops on the sun
    forever forgotten ...''

  • myacidwords
    March 6, 2008
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    nice imagery. i love the line "into the void of lost control".


  • Tyiura
    March 6, 2008
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    W-WOW

    no words can describe the feelings behind this outstanding poem.


  • Elle Kaye
    March 5, 2008

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    Wow

    This is absoultely terrific. I cant tell you how much i love it. I wish that i could write like that. The imagry is superb, the simplicity of the language just makes it all the more meaningful. This is brilliant.

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