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Show In My Eyes



The world revolves around things unseen
With importance placed on what is shown
The smallest are borne in the eye so keen
That can see far beyond the unknown

The gossamer wing and the vein of leaf
Transparent thing of trust and belief
Strength of wind and reach of the sky
Faith of friend and vision in the eye
Thoughts of beauty and scent of flower
Feelings of duty and feelings of power

Living things have codes by which they live
From the smallest mote to the largest stone
Unaware of the importance of what they give
and the things unseen are the blood and bone














Author notes

Show in my Eyes A. Ebert
The co-existence of unseen things that are the essence of life is what keeps the balance of nature equal.

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  • individuality gold member
    August 8, 2008

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    a good piece of poetry, Thoughts of beauty - that is how we should be yes but i think most tend to move along the darker shades, we say we love the lihgt but then in actions we show we love the dark in life more. i once did an experiment with 2 pieces of art i did, i posted them, one lihgt and one dark and the dark picture got 10 times more clicks than the light


  • Emile
    March 20, 2008

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    Good

    Your message is clear and truly poetically expressed with wisdom gleaned from years of experiences the author now shares with the reader. Your words speak with power and your mind set flows onto the page so we may relate with you and where your words lead us. Wonderful work with great thought given to the subject mater as it gently unfolds for the readers delight.


  • Blue Rew silver member
    March 8, 2008
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    This conveys a chant-like relevance to life.
    I see the honest belief here in all things
    being connected and it reflects my own personal
    beliefs. You have even managed to express the
    title within~~"and vision in the eye"
    which does relate well to both the title and
    the image. The whole theme of a circle of interconnection and bonds applies aptly to the
    hidden image as well. I very much like the
    message given here as well as the metaphoric
    way it is displayed. Blue


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