When I killed you, I didn’t look into your eyes
I didn’t want to see all the people It will hurt
The guilt was too much and I killed myself, too
That hurt even worst and through it all
I have not learned a thing, at all
The pain just hurts, a lot
Next time that I kill you, I’ll know
What kind of pain, I have dealt
A contest entry
- best prewrites by serenity silvermoon.
600 points, ended April 6, 2008, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I AM CUT by darkalesyse.
650 points, ended April 9, 2008, 30 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Great write and nice flow to it! Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest!
~Tiff -
this is a very amazing poem..it rocked.
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hmmm... This is very interesting... and very hard to read. I think this is very interesting... and you have a start to a good writer... perhaps if you keep writing your style will become better... But, I Def. think you have a start to something.
I like what emotion you held in this piece...
~ interesting
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interesting. This has so much feeling in it, but it could gone somewhere more and it didn't.
And I didn't understand the ending. I think the punctuation is used incorrectly and that's why, but I could be wrong
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