Softly, slowly wondering why?
Entirely yours, was what he once said
Remember that i'll be there until the end, and now,
Existing only in my dreams.
Not because you is what he says now
It’s only that we’ve grown apart
Taking his words in, serenely, calmly
Your words, harsh made me understand.
A contest entry
- Acrostics-four options by TabbyCat.
450 points, ended March 10, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Up Down by Darkwell.
800 points, ended July 27, 2008, 32 entries
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Big message little acrostic sad and sweet. We all get one of those guys in life i think sometimes more then 1
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WTG! Good luck in the contest -
This was sad yet touching at the same time.. I'm sure that there are many people out there that have gone through this as well.. you did a wonderful job in expressing a lot in this little Acrostic.. Thank you very much for sharing. Best of luck..
Angel
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awww so sad.
i like the acrostic though
i can't write those properly.
punctuation would make it flow better.
aka, last line could be changed to:
"your words, although harsh, made me understand." -
Hmmm....this is sad. In your R line you might want to put an apostrophie in I'll because I read it as "ill" and had to go back. It ruined the flow of your poem. I think I can safely say, we've all been there. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
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