rip
tear
rape
die
no time for a goodbye
run
drive
escape
survive
try not to leave anything behind
write
inform
explain
send
i hope you're proud, mom & dad
relax
lay down
breathe
sleep
tomorrow's going to be a new day
Author notes
i tried to make it weird since its written by the serial killer.
i didnt succeed in making the subject clear, it was supposed to be that the killer is doing the slaughter for his parents, which are the puppeteers.
(cant spell that)
and he kept in touch with them through the letters..
sorry about my lame english, my native lenguage is spanish
A contest entry
- Serial Killers by Tattboyspet.
425 points, ended March 6, 2008, 8 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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Comments
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I liked your work, but I kind of wish I didn't read your author notes. I enjoyed the appearance of darkness coming into light and, to find out about the serial killer angle was disappointing. Still, that is no reflection on the quality of your work. This is a very well-written piece. Thanks!
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I thought this was really well done
Your rhyming flows perfectly and the feel of a disturbed mind comes through in your form.
p.s. Your language isn't lame - the i should've been capitalised, but that's about it!
I enjoyed this one - thank you for your entry
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