it's just a blur,
the salvation you offered,
and as I walk down the boulevard,
I recognize,
it was your charity
that kept my knees clean,
broken spirits
clutter the gutter
and redemption
has fled out the back door
In a list
A contest entry
- 30 minute Quickie :] by Jasmine Rayne.
450 points, ended March 5, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Prewrites Mania by Celticmoon.
450 points, ended March 30, 2008, 84 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I have read this a few times and each time New and different images come to mind. I like that about this. It shows me the many ways this piece can be interpreted.
Thank you for entering
and best of luck to you in the contest!
Blessings
Bel
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Thoughts
This really made me do another take on reading....which is seriously rare because it made me think...kudos -
i love the way you expressed it with such short lines they add such an effect to it. a sad but beautifu piece
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I like this. It's simple, yet impactive and enticing. It's very sad, but I love sad poetry. :] Thanks for entering and good luck in my contest.
-Lily ♥
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