She cries:
with eyes sewn shut
and fists clenched tight.
Coloured beads shatter into rainbows,
while shooting stars make those noises
that you only hear on special keyboards.
Surrounded by pretty things,
and she's just rocking back and forth.
With those unfocused eyes:
like looking through steamy glass.
Shadows play along sky blue walls,
of things she would rather not see.
Him and her, lips locked tight,
holding hands in pitch black night.
With eyes shown shut
and fists clenched tight
she cries.
Author notes
Wow, this is the first thing I've written in three months =]
I hope you like it
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A contest entry
- "She/He Cries" by JustAnotherIdoit.
450 points, ended March 20, 2008, 21 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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What a wonderful poem!
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This is wonderful(: I love the emotion and how it's so easy to relate to. Beautiful, aye -
I just really love this, you are such an amazing talent!!! -
bravo
A sad, even brooding piece, but with sharp and crisp images throughout... most well and ably done! bravo... bravo... bravo...
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Dark and Sad, the imagery is good- your word choice: excellent and it flows like honey on a hot day. The content is not my usual fare, but you've captured frustration, pain and sorrow- vividly. This is very well written.
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this was very well written, thanks for the entry
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I seriously loved this,
You put so much emotion in it,
This is my favorite partt:
"Coloured beads shatter into rainbows,
while shooting stars make those noises
that you only hear on special keyboards"
Amazing!
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