Aboriginal to his usually xeric desert of a mind.
The undulating siren of thoughts became more loquacious.
Standing on the line in the sand,
He pushes the limits of sanity.
Tired of a stagnant life, a battalion is armed within.
Bowels of each thought quivered as the skirmish bled on.
Reoccurring thoughts with their fulcrum of memories escape death once again.
Constellations form her face and he remembers the days of rapture.
His heart is the only rock in the ocean of sand.
Someday he will have a victorious celebration
For then there will be much bloviation.
Until then he just puts another X on the calendar.
Author notes
Imagery
Petycash - Age 15.
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short and sweet i like it
well done
god bless
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very intelligent write...but still gets the point across without using too many big words
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Deep and well put together. You are very gifted. Use it to your advantage. Kudos to you. Shancy.
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this is a really nice, piece tis short but really good. thanks for entering
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Appeal 10/10
Fitting the Prompt 7/10
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This is beautifully sad. Thanks for entering this in my contest. I wish you much luck
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Ok, wow. This is completely my favortie of everything I've read of yours. You've absolutely perfectly taken the moment and immortalised it.
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Ooooh, I like this one. It is dripping with imagery. I especially like the lines "the undulating sire of thoughts became more loquacious" and I love the line "His heart is the only rock in the ocean of sand." Love it...love it...love it!! Great write, and thanks for entering. I know it wasn't easy! Good luck.
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