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Him


His voice was a deep and rhythmic allure;

masculine and caressing as if expressing inner compassion

and passion, though not his strong point, blessed his vocals.

Soft lips that almost stole the secrets out of the sky

the type that could soothe the cruelest of heart;

Touch so smooth and seductive, an inner hunger

bursts from the touch of a teaser of inner thoughts -

a man of most insatiable pleasures, a sinner sensual.

The hands, almost a different serenade of sensations

a complexion of milky white wonder and buttered bliss -

each touch, an inner fight, begs a further encounter.

Brown eyes of a blinding, befalling beauty;

chocolate treasures, an inner hunger of sorts -

sudden pleasures, from the eyes to a sober soul.

Beneath outwardly exteriors the most memorable of marks,

a kind soul that never lets lovers live down, a clumsy kindness -

and a mind that knows its boundaries, inner thoughts and fears

the most endearing of all comes last here, within his most treasured place -

a heart that always loves and ears that always hear.

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x Empathic Rose x
that's him.

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  • Kari gold member
    March 31, 2008
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    Sissy, this one has over 15 lines but you can remove it and put in another


  • Freestyle Bushido
    March 19, 2008
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    sounds like one hell of a guy, thanks for entering and good luck.


  • Blooming Poet
    March 16, 2008
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    That is one hell of a guy. I love the description of brown eyes(I am partiial to brown eyes, since mine are brown). Brown eyes of a blinding, befalling beauty; chocolate treasures, an inner hunger of sorts -


  • Naridill
    March 16, 2008

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    Although eliminated and not through to the judging of this rounds. You worked the theme beautifully!


  • storiesuntold gold member
    March 8, 2008
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    Good write

    It has a good story line but I got lost a bit maybe its just me


  • Rose Dark Thorn silver member
    March 6, 2008

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    That sounds like the most perfect guy in the world. Augh. I love my boy though, because he puts up with me and loves me to bits. Beautifully expressed, sweetheart. Your words are utter elegance.


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    March 5, 2008

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    you know this one inspired me so much that i went back and changed the one I wrote and now it makes more sense. its amazing wel done twinny i love you

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