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Heroin vs. Cocaine

I look for danger, I relish the pain.
You ask me to forget.
But you of all beings should understand.
You said I was your heroin, well, you're my cocaine.
How can I forget?
When the story of our past, is forever written on the palm of my hand?
I don't know how much more I can withstand.
I hear your voice in my mind,
my love, how could be so unkind?
How could you leave me behind?
I don't want to belong with mankind.
I want to be like you, I want to shine.
Come hold me again,
I can't let you go.
I can still feel your lips on my vein.
Come home to me,
to the place of rain.

Author notes

Bella Swan is my one of my favorite characters in a book, so I wrote this in her POV.

My favorite Twilight character would be Emmett. =]


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  • purplemoon
    August 29
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    WOW! this is a very good way for bella to say how she feel. Bravo!

    thanks for he entry.
    kathryn


  • Antebellum
    June 24

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    "I hear your voice in my mind,
    my love, how could be so unkind?
    How could you leave me behind?
    I don't want to belong with mankind"

    Love the rhyme.
    awesome write.


  • The Hardest Goodbye
    December 25, 2008
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    very awesomly awesome xD loved it, good luck in my contest (:


  • BrokenBleedingWolf
    December 18, 2008
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    I like it!


  • albinoblacksheep720
    December 1, 2008
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    I already commented. Great job. Good luck


  • Joshua DePesa
    November 29, 2008
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    Beautiful write(:
    I loved it, keep up the good work.


  • TwilightDazzles
    November 29, 2008
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    Nicely done...I like the subtle reference to James biting her. If you made this longer you could elaborate more on her suffering when he is gone. New Moon is probably my least favorite of the books because Edward is gone most of the time. And with Bella so messed up about it, it makes you think bad thoughts about him..eeek. Anyway, excellent job, thanks for entering and best wishes

  • albinoblacksheep720
    November 29, 2008

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    Nice...

    I like that. I felt Bella's emotions in this. I see her mental self go nuts without Edward. Lol. It's short, sweet, and to the point. I love those kinds of poem. Overall, great job.


  • Maili Knephthan gold member
    October 22, 2008

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    I like that very much it is very much like I have seen it in the two books I have read. You did well writting it from that point of view and the words fit. thank you for entering


  • Bohemianwriter
    October 22, 2008

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    IMPRESSIVE

    wooow this is impressive i can see why you won all those trophies with this!!!...i loves the first line, "I look for danger, I relish the pain." THAT DEFANITLEY SOUNDS LIKE BELLA!!!
    THANKS FOR ENTERING! AND GOOD LUCK!!!!


  • storiesuntold gold member
    October 14, 2008
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    Very well written piece here

    It captured me the whole way through a great poem this is


  • Missa
    October 3, 2008
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    woah! now there gone!!! what's with that???

  • Missa
    October 3, 2008
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    i've read this before because you won my other contest, but did it have the numbers last time? whats with them.


  • Luthien Luinwe
    September 18, 2008

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    Love it! Beautifully written, good job on the rhyme scheme. I can't pick out a favorite part, it's all amazing! Great write and thanks so much for entering.


  • TChaplinette
    September 8, 2008
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    that was stunning.


    "I hear your voice in my mind,
    my love, how could be so unkind?
    How could you leave me behind?
    I don't want to belong with mankind.
    I want to be like you, I want to shine."


    looooved it.



    thank you for entering
    and good luck!

    taylor


  • corrupt angel
    August 30, 2008

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    Lovely write! I love twilight, and poems about it make me smile! Great flow and rhyme.

    "I can still feel your lips on my vein.
    Come home to me,
    to the place of rain."

    Very nice. great write!

  • soccer220
    August 11, 2008
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    Very nice! This is very well written. My favorite line is "You said I was your heroin, well, you're my cocaine" because that seems to sum up how Bella and Edward feel about each other. I also like how Bella is longing for Edward, but yet she is also mad at him for leaving. ( I would be, too) Thanks for entering and good luck!


  • Zane Rose
    August 8, 2008
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    This is really good! I'm in love with Twilight so this gets to me. You really captured Bella's feelings and for that I commend you. My favourite line is "You said I was your heroin, well, you're my cocaine". That was brilliant. Good job and good luck!
    ~Allie~


  • Missa
    July 29, 2008
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    i LOVE this! i love the rhyme scheme, EVERYTHING! GO TEAM EDWARD!!!


  • Jfd
    June 9, 2008
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    i thought this was clever, overall i enjoyed it, I think that you could have given more....I liked "When the story of our past, is forever written on the palm of my hand?" I'm assuming you're referring to the scar james left on her hand....nice job overall


  • NiurTarow
    April 7, 2008

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    Very clever. I will probably never quite forgive Edward for leaving her like that. Men always think they're doing the right thing in those situations, don't they? But such is not often the case. Masterfully done.

    Good luck in the contest.


  • ConvenientExcuses
    March 5, 2008

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    You really got into the character of Bella in this one. I could feel her heartache. Great job! Thanks for entering and good luck!

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