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the curvaceous corners
of contained consciousness
careen [against each other].

we're catching rainwater.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Image by thaumadzo at deviantart.com
Prompt B

In a list

A contest entry

Please tell me what you think

    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression? Line numbers
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?) (Line numbers)

Comments

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  • carole21
    March 8

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    nice

    nice write for a short one . . good word choices and alliteration . . liked "the curvaceous corners of contained consciousness" and "we're catching rainwater . . congrats on the trophy


  • And Hyetal
    March 5

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    I like all the "c" alliteration here! I like the setting of a rainy day.

    You definately deserved this gold.

    ~Cassie

  • this is so amazing i am thankful id didnt get a chance to enter this one..would have lost hehe. well done hun

  • SUCH a fantastic take on that prompt

    Yipppeee dances around your new shiney golden beauty

    Well done


    Delila


  • Ryno
    March 5

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    Wow. Beautiful, one of the most beautiful from you I've read.

    I loved the fact of it being a journey of emotion in such few words!

    Grats on the gold


  • Naridill gold member
    March 5

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    Beautifully and endearing - the smooth wording is captivating and such delicately penned.
    Thanks for entering,
  • I like this, it's beautiful imagery. Best of luck!
    Amber Shining

  • SchizoChic
    March 5
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    Simply beautiful. Great take on the prompt. Best of luck.

  • shuvi
    March 5

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    Loveeeeed it. And the last line's a total absolute complete punch . Way to go Love and cheers, shuvi

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