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One Hand

When the world slumps

beneath the clouds of expectations

the heart doesn't crave

cream pie gratifications

from sugary messiahs or pastry tales of magic.

 

Standing in the shadows of our dream tent

where the spirit gropes for answers,

all one longs to feels

is a loving hand to care and encourage,

not a tongue to whisper flatteries

that are vapors in affections,

evaporating before they can become

a landscape in hope.

 

One moans the deepest pleading voice

from one's darkest crevices,

rising as a simple song of yearning,

with a wish to not be seen as a deliverer or guardian,

or disciple to any whim,

only another soul

in dire need of a comrade

to face the foes of trial

both holding trust's shield

so we both can take

another step without fear.

Author notes

For Option 3

"Don't walk behing me; i may not lead. Don't walk in front of me; i may not follow. Just walk beside me and be my friend" -Albert Camus

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  • Beauty Of Silence
    March 6, 2008

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    wow! This is so beautiful! i love this so much... it makes me want tot read this amazing poem again and again! Great take on the poem... What more can i say? this is perfect!

    The flow was great... the words fit in perfectly well! What a lovely masterpiece! I loved this from head to toe... tho these were my favpurite lines:

    all one longs to feels
    is a loving hand to care and encourage,
    not a tongue to whisper flatteries
    that are vapors in affections,

    WOW! this left me speechless! Thanks loads for entering my contest! i appreciate it... thanks for this sweet read! best wishes!

    Much love always,
    Ranji


  • going nowhere
    March 5, 2008
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    OH MY!!!! read directly into my heart! great job!


  • StarEyes
    March 5, 2008

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    What a great take on the prompt! I love this!! There is something in this one that really speaks to the reader!! Wonderful!!

    Best of luck in this contest!!