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surface tension


Held together
by injured heart’s thin film~
appearing calm,

collected,
but ready to burst.


Hoping
to hold it together
a bit longer...



please don’t touch~

quite yet



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picture prompt...love
27 words

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  • Metaphorist
    September 28, 2008
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    Cheater! My own poem by the same title was inspired by this poem. Lol. But thanks for entering it and good luck!


  • insearchofsweetness
    March 10, 2008

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    whoa I am gone a couple days and your poetry is flowing in high gear. . .you really have a way with these picture prompts. . .very creative


  • country-girl
    March 8, 2008

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    oh my gosh, i felt like i was about to pop! i was afraid to breathe while reading this, the imagery was so strong. simply stunning.


  • The Hermit
    March 6, 2008
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    It's short and could have more onto it.
    It feels like a person on the last grip on life.


    • going nowhere
      March 6, 2008
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      i was limited to 30 words.. i used 27. it is meant to be about healing... you know how you want to stay encapsulated ... stand offish, before you let the tears flow to continue the healing process...and the slightest touch will break that surface tension of the water droplet. (the picture inspiration)
      don't know if i explained it very well, but this is longer than the poem


  • Keyser Soze
    March 5, 2008

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    The image I see is of the corner of a safe inside a heart... where with each pulse the skin that wraps the safe is pulled taught and then released each time threatening to burst... drawing thin. In order to open the safe you have to see the lock, but to do that you have to first be crushed by the massive safe as it drops from its cocoon.
    A marvelous depiction dearest, well drawn.


    • going nowhere
      March 5, 2008
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      the image you see is incredible... your insight will never cease to make my jaw drop in pure awe... i know your words too well.

      thank you so much.


  • alivefromlove
    March 5, 2008
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    this is a great poem amgiga. wonderful flow, i love this poem =)


  • Metaphorist
    March 5, 2008

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    OMG! The title together with the poem is just... PERFECT. I think you could have done more with it if it wasn't for the word limit. I just might have to steal that title though

    Good luck...in the contest and based on the content of the poem

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