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My life portrays an ocean

My life portrays an ocean
So powerful, so strong
Breaking the sharp cliffs into rocks
As I go on
I am smooth yet I am gentle
Flowing with a smooth pace
Cutting off the sharp rocks
Into smooth round face
Ocean is a reassuring friend
And an unbeatable foe
So gentle, it tickles
So strong it breaks through
My life portrays an ocean
So powerful, so strong
Changing the face of world
As I go on.

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  • Sound of Madness
    June 10, 2008

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    I love metaphoric poems. I've never read one before where someone compaired themselves to an ocean. I like this.


  • Cat10
    June 2, 2008

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    thank you for entering! this is a very beautiful poem and so wonderfully written! you did a great job! good luck!


  • Ale E
    March 6, 2008

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    I really liked this. Nice use of words. I loved how you used the ocean to help potray your life. Very nicely done.

    Thank you for entering, i wish you the best of luck in my contest.

    ale xox


  • creationsfromheart
    March 6, 2008
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    I like this and I think many of our lives are just as you have described! it is a bit over the word limit, however if you change the stanza to make it shorter it will work in the book, look at the stanzas on the front of the contest and it will help you.

    • zoralielda
      March 8, 2008
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      sorry, but I can't shorten it up. How much chances do I have to get it published?

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