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Glass Half Full

Five less toys
with dust and all their bunnies
two less chairs, my children, my honeys
a room where others can fill the place
otherwise, a deserted and lonely space.

A difference between 'room' and 'space'.

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  • Joe Spencer
    April 8

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    When I think of toys, lonely does not come to mind right away. I thought of Toy Story how Woody became neglected. This poem is trying to tell you to look at the little things in life and appreciate them. When you have to grow up. As you mature you change; your body, your ideas, your pastimes and your relationships, especially some of your favorite toys too.


  • xxhoopstar21xx
    March 26

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    wooow

    wooooow
    great
    its short but i really like it..... *scratches chin*
    VERY WELL DONE COOKIEZEAL!!!!!!!
    VERY VERY WELL DONE!!
    GREAT WRITE!!
    KEEP WRITING PLZ!!!!!!!
    YOU ARE VERY GOOD!!!!!

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    Hoopstar21

  • Sprite silver member
    March 22

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    This is so nostalgic for me. The picture you painted was perfect in its simplicity. I actually do feel wistful and a little sad now! And my sons are always around anyway!


  • Barb Davidson silver member
    March 17

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    But when they all come crowding back through the door, big hairy men now, no longer the lost little boys i remember, they fill that lonely space and leave new memories to be stored away with the baby smiles and first school tears..

    Good to see you my friend


    • CookieZeal Greeters member
      March 19
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      GO-o-Ow leeeeeyyyy, Barb. You're right! (including the hair)

      I'm wondering what my Mother was thinking. New age, I guess. We never reEallly thought it was an option to 'go back'. Once out... all done.
      Thank you for reading and giving us the wise scoop! Great to see YOU............darling friend!

  • myrataal silver member
    March 10

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    Oh, Dianne!

    How well I know this empty nest syndrome! The simple words stress the very complex feelings behind this short poem, and words like deserted and lonely gripped my heart in deep endopathy.

    HUGS to you, my friend. They are placed inside your heart.

    Love
    Myra


  • Manicmuze
    March 8

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    awwww... this one touches me.
    i've felt that change, empty nest sorta thing.
    as always, you stir emotion in me.
    beautifully said,
    ~ wendy
  • BobbieA
    March 5

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    Knowing what this poem is about I feel a sense of sadness but hopeful expectations at the same time. Great poems sista.


  • BellaD
    March 5

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    Interesting poem that makes the reader ponder the subtle semantic differences of "room" and "space" Seems like the guest room that was formerly a (now adult) children's bedroom.
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