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Dark Despair

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The dark despair that fills my soul,
My never ending search to fulfill this goal,
To find true love in the darkened world,
Before cynicism,
Destroys the image of my perfect girl.

Everytime that you see me smile,
You won't see past the instilled guile,
And that beneath the face I let you see,
Rests a private hell,
Set up and running just for me.

So like in a show I played my part,
And now I'm left with the broken heart,
But this is no show, there's no happy ending,
This is real life,
No special re-writes, no ammending.

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Option 3 and Option 7, Michael-B, A Beautiful Lie by 30 Seconds to Mars

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  • Flowergirl
    August 30
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    very nice i enjoyed reading it it had a lot of emotion...
  • celadia
    July 29

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    Aww. so sad, but the way you wrote this is superb. i hope that you don't become too cynical even though it's hard,
  • wow, well done! This poem just oozes despair... glad I could read it!

  • Starlight-Owl
    April 14

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    By far the best entry in its catergory. One of the best in the contest. Very raw. I loved it. Amazing my friend. Best of luck. Infinate clappys on a perfect piece.

  • Aeris36
    April 11

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    This is a great poem, you can sense the caution you have in trusting. I appreciate these lines...

    "So like in a show I played my part,
    And now I'm left with the broken heart,
    But this is no show, there's no happy ending,
    This is real life,
    No special re-writes, no ammending. "

    Well done!

  • Paranoia Dead
    April 10

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    amazing purley amazing. your words are so painful & cold but yet they upbring the spirits within me. its great. ~Benji Nichole~

  • Lucian Valcor
    March 27
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    this is a good poem i would say the rhyme is a little off and a couple lines didn't exactly fit the poem like this one "Set up and running just for me." i understood what you were trying to get across in the poem but the before and after line it just didn't flow with it other then that i like the poem really tells how you are feeling you did a good job

    Lucian

  • britwants
    March 17

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    Very well done! You have talent. Wish i could rhyme that well. I try but end up doing free verse instead.


  • liduen silver member
    March 15
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    Great write! I particurally like the last stanza. Good job and good luck in the contest

  • eleno
    March 10
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    i think this is great, and sounds real sad but but not in a cry way. its great. -eleno

  • excelent

    excelently written. I hate people sometimes but they bring the best out of you, just wait til one makes you happy

  • VERY NICE! I really like it, is it the same story with the other one too?


  • Meme Wheeler
    March 5

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    Very nice Michael. I love what you have penned here. You have given your heart to us once more.

    Meme


    • Michael-B gold member
      March 5
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      Thanks it's just a shame that it took a drunken night, a stupid question sent by text, and the worst possible answer from the girl i thought was for me, to write this poem. oh well at least something benfited. lol.
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