They have made passage through,
moored the physicalities,
with souls awaiting judgement.
Across tumultuous seas they travelled
for a lifetime, to reach this door.
Upheavels have been many,
in both alarm and tranquility
as they now float in hope of peace;
this final resting place.
Through the window of my life
I have stumbled in so many directions,
the burdens almost more than I can bear.
My staff of knowledge has guided me here.
The past is bottled for posterity
under veils of questioned decisions.
So here I await my own judgement,
balancing on the seesaw
between trepidation and expectation.
Author notes
Photo credit: Salvador Dali
A contest entry
- PIF METAPHOR PROMPT CONTEST- Only 10 Poets, closes after 10 entries....This is to PIF for the gold I won in Mr. Penmans contest by Roaddog Wolf.
425 points, ended March 7, 2008, 7 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This work will stand alone, but, it feeds the picture to give it depth and leads the reader into an understanding of the painting. Wonderful description-The the window of my life I have stumbled in so many directions, the burdens almost more than I can bear. This places the reader where their life follows, when nothing goes well for them almost beyond what is bearable.
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judgement day
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awesome
I loved the flow of this piece it's soooo well written
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Excellent write
Very good and full of meaning and metaphor, thought the flow was a lil off in a spot or two, really identified with this stanza, seems I have the same window,
"Through the window of my life
I have stumbled in so many directions,
the burdens almost more than I can bear." enjoyed this write very much
Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest
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wow great write good luck
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Very nice, as well as a more original form than most.
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lovely it made me weep.
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I TOO HAD TO READ THIS TWICE IT IS VERY DEEP AND A PLACE WHERE ALL OF US WILL BE... AND FEELINGS WE ALL WILL HAVE. EXCELLENT WRITE GOD BLESS
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excellent
a pleasure to read, my favourite part is the third stanza I think it is particularly effective because it is a familiar feeling to a lot of people. well done!
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I had to read this a few times, it's an amazing write, captures the image... it does make you think quite intensely. So well written. well done. xxx
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I read this a couple of times just to get to the real depth of it....quite a pensive place you went with this[but I guess one that we all sort of go to now and then and wonder and hope]We are indeed "souls awaiting judgement". And inspired by a Dali picture.....I am a big fan of his [for just as one does with poetry-he leaves so much opened to interpretation]Best wishes and much love
xoxoxoxo
reenie
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FECKING BRILLIANT..... this whoa... going in the bookmarks... I love this.... you are on some roll sweets, I think the judge will love this...
... I'm not wishing luck this time.. so not needed
Karen
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