I longed, for honesty's warmth
trickling your face of deception;
I looked, through bleeding eyelids,
............only saw mask of ice.
Author notes
20 simple words, Prompt "His face was made of ice" (From 'Shadowland' by Peter Straub )
A contest entry
- Simple quickie by Tattboyspet.
300 points, ended March 5, 2008, 9 entries
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Very good description with such few words good use of them.
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lies - personally I think they lead to more trouble than they are worth!!!!
nice take on the prompt - thank you for your entry
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credit the author
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Done, sorry
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