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What It Takes

It takes a trip to hell
To get up to heaven.

And it takes a lifetime 
To hear death's hollow bell.

Joy is ever present
Where pain is ever prime.

You need the knowing of bitter pain.
To feel the feeling of love's sweet rain.


Author notes

I realize this is not progressively bad to good but each stanza still deals with that theme so I hope it still counts! thank you and good luck judging!

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  • Stevie.me
    December 30, 2008

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    4.4 out of 5

    5 senses - 3.5 few senses
    Metaphors - 4
    Feeling- 5
    Unity-4.5
    flow-5

    average rating -4.4


  • ChelseySmile
    December 29, 2008

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    Wow.
    Nice flow.
    However, stanza two is weak in the rhyme department. Or perhaps it was intended?

    This piece is chalk full of what I'm looking for, hope, strength.
    It reminds me of the quote on the contest page by Edgar Allen Poe "Never to suffer is never to have been blessed"

    I always think back to that quote when I'm dealing with tough times.

    Thank you for entering my contest, and good luck.

  • Acidanthra
    October 29, 2008
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    You have a good point, but for someone other than me. I applaud you on your work and keep writing!


  • Megan Awesome
    October 23, 2008

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    I like the last stanza the best I think. I can see how this would fit with the picture in an odd different way. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck!!!
    Megan


  • Nom de Plume
    October 23, 2008

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    Beautiful write... and so very true, for without the low times, we never truly appreciate the good times.... I think the word "up" is redundant in the first couplet. wish you well in the contest


  • Hope Angel silver member
    June 17, 2008
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    The first stanza is amazing. Nice job. Thanks for entering


  • my.stars.dont.shine
    May 14, 2008
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    thanks for your words! it means a lot. =]


  • Beautiful-N-Broken silver member
    May 14, 2008
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    Great write. Keep up the good work. Good luck in the contest.


  • Cesarean
    May 1, 2008

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    Wow. This is amazing each stanza, the dichotomies you present are so true to how we grow and change as people! Thanks so much for sharing!


  • daviscth silver member
    April 30, 2008

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    Your words are so true my dear.Especially he first two lines. After the death of my granddaughter, I've been to hell but still am fighting my way back to get to heaven. I enjoyed this very much.


  • crazymomma
    April 24, 2008

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    A very nice poem. I like the message but it's not really what I'm looking for in this contest. I want poems about what you think heaven will be like. Thanks for entering.

  • californiagirl
    March 5, 2008
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    I felt that the first stanza was intruiging, the second made me stop for a moment, but after that I thought that the poem fell a little. The end seemed rather abrupt and I din't think that it really fit in with the rest of the poem. It has potential, but in it's current state, I'm not a huge fan. Thanks so much for your entry and good luck!

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