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My Tortured Dream

I have this re-accruing dream
That you are by my side.
Your hands are locked with mine,
And you were looking in my eyes.
You repeated all the things,
That you always used to say...
Again promising you'll be there,
That you'd never go away.
You hugged me once again,
And it all just felt so real.
Things were finally the way they used to be,
I was happy just as I used to feel.
Then i woke and the dream faded away,
And I was again alone in my bed,
Trying to hold onto the dream.
To remember all the things you had said.
But it was all little use,
Forgetting was compared to dieing.
And I noticed as i felt my wet cheeks,
Outside my dream in reality i was left crying.
Just like every other time,
I had that bitter sweet dream,
There was one image I didn't forget,
And never i never will, i believe.
The sound of your caring loving words,
Spoke such lies i now forced to see...
The words i used to know so well...
Are the words i feel and cry to now.

Author notes

option two- break ups.

A contest entry

Option 1-

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  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    July 29, 2008

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    sometimes not having someone we love with us and dreaming of it is worse than dreaming of someone to love but you never have someone.


  • Sound of Madness
    July 9, 2008

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    Thanks for entering my contest. Dreams torture the mind in twisted ways. I wish you much luck in the contest.


  • XxGoldenxXDawnxX
    June 20, 2008

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    Despite the tense thingy (I do that often get past and present tense a bit mixed) I thought this was very emotional - more of a longing or a nightmare than what could be considered a dream - as dreams go it seems a very unhappy one. *hugs*


  • Lyndon gold member
    June 17, 2008

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    re-occurring or recurrent dream!
    Mix of tenses: "Your hands ARE locked with mine,
    And you WERE looking in my eyes."
    I am afraid that many young men are physically-minded and say lovely things that you take to heart to get a warm cuddle. This does not ease heartache, I know. The reality is , well, lies and being taken advantage of. But then the opera says "woman is fickle!" So! I shall leave it to you.
    Thanks for being part of this contest anthology.


  • Blooming Poet
    May 11, 2008

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    I agree with peppermint no one deserves to have to endure this kind of pain. Ii feel bad for you. This is great


  • Peppermint star xxx
    May 11, 2008

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    Aww =[
    I'm so sorry hun.
    Nobody deserves to felt this way.
    It's ok
    I really liked the poem
    Possibly one of my fave love poems
    Good work!


  • exithere
    May 9, 2008

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    its a good write and it made me want to continue on reading. but at the same time it had some points where it bored me. good luck in contest


  • Kassandra Nyktos
    April 29, 2008

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    good write, kept my attention, kudos for using a background I rarely see anymore.

    Please put option number in your notes.

    Kass


  • KayJay
    April 18, 2008

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    Wonderfully creative response to the prompt... Well done! Good luck in the contest...
    Ken


  • nikkia
    April 13, 2008

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    this was well written and i like the flow. i enjoyed reading it and i think i got a sense of who are through it. so great job! thanks for entering and good luck in the contest


  • Jasmine Minx
    April 9, 2008

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    this dream is common use it for showing what you feel inside harness it and make it yours. so no one can take it from you.

    ali


  • Morphine Mayhem
    April 2, 2008
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    Option 2 Love.


  • trinajean
    March 24, 2008
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    Like I said before, I liked this poem alot and now that I know it's Landon and Jamie, it makes alot more sense to me! It's a sad story and you portrayed the sadness of it very well. Good Job!


  • Morphine Mayhem
    March 24, 2008
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    The couple i chose is "A walk to remember " how she has left him, and hes forced to realize it... Aw :(

  • trinajean
    March 24, 2008
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    Hmm...I think I may have been mistaken. xD I don't think you entered this into my contest. I'm sorry! I still think it is a great poem though!

  • trinajean
    March 24, 2008
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    This was really well done. I loved the sincerity of the poem! Just a few words of advice, you might want to captilize your "i"'s, it makes your poetry seem more professional.

    Could you please put what movie you took this off of in your author's notes?


  • Feirce.Dino
    March 22, 2008

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    I Really Like This Very Well Written I Hope Who Ever Hurt You Gets It Comin To Them XD Jk But Keep Up The Writes


  • Ale E
    March 14, 2008

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    wow this is very nicely written. I liked it.

    Thank you very much for entering my contest. I wish you the best of luck.

    ale oxx


  • Forever in his arms
    March 5, 2008

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    NICE... I DNT KNOW WHO THIS IS ABOUT BUT IM SURE THEY HURT YOU REALLY BAD...UGG I HATE GUYS. I WANT MY ROMEO TO COME! wink wink

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