The soft, sensual woman
Cradled inside her mind
Oblivious to sensations
Just focused on her determination
To not be a statistic
Born into nothing
Trying to find something
A way to survive
To be alive
To exist
Entrapted in a life of nothingness
Just a stepping stone
A way out of poverty
people stare as they pass by
Fighting back the urge to cry
Not ashamed, just a way to live
Selling all she has to give
A contest entry
- Why? by Pandorea.
900 points, ended March 5, 2008, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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WOW this is so deep and i can feel her in this totally. thats a rare talent you have to make the reader become your person in the poem they feel it so much. its just amazing
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thank you for such a nice comment. I havent really been on in a while so its nice to know that things i write dont go unnoticed. Thanks again
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Powerful poem! way to write!
This was a powerful write, tore us in two!
What a great way to use your voice to celebrate the
strength of courage amidst the pains of life!
ears/Seattle loved this poem!
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Starkly honest and fresh... Quite dark and sad but beautiful in it's clear eyed look at the plight of so many women who feel trapped and end up "selling all they have to give." Wonderful write.
Ken
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this is quite a moving piece. i can't pin done what it was, exactly, but this was quite "wow"ish. you really made me feel for the woman.
thank you for entering.
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