When i see you i just have to smile,
Because i know that your worth all the while,
You bring me up when I'm down,
You help me up when i fall,
When we are both in pain,
You help me through it,
When you smile it brightens the day,
When you smile all the pain goes away,
Memories of you,
I never want to let this go,
Smiling as i remember,
Now you are gone,
Now you are remembered,
I'm stronger because of you,
But when you smile,
I can't help but smile,
Because you inspire me.
A contest entry
- March New Members contest by AP Greeters.
600 points, ended April 8, 2008, 64 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
I wrote it, i know it is completley contradicting, tell me your thoughts please!
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Welcome to allpoetry and thanks for entering!
People who are in our lives to show inspiration are important. Because they are the people who show us to move on and up in the world. It is an important factor of life and you have shown it well here.
Thank you for entering and good luck in the contest
I hope you enjoy allpoetry
Faerie
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Thank you for your entry and Welcome to allpoetry
It does come off as contradictory, but emotions can often be conflicting and this demonstrates that point nicely. Good flow and structure. Thanks for sharing.
I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.
God Bless
Tammy
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Welcome to AllPoetry
The final 3 lines confuse me completely compared to the rest of the poem as you wrote
"Now you are gone,
Now you are remembered,
I'm stronger because of you"
Perhaps I am miss-reading it.
Just a quick grammar mistake
"i know that your worth all the while" - 'i' -'I' and 'your' - 'you're'
This is a great write; just confusing slightly for me.
♥
Thank you for your entry
Best of luck
Stay safe
~Manda
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Welcome to AllPoetry
You're right, it's very contradicting, but it appears it was meant to be this way. Thought provoking and bittersweet. You're lucky to have someone like that in your life. Good luck in the contest
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Welcome to Allpoetry
It's wonderful when we have someone in our lives who are there through thick and thin. You have expressed those feelings and thoughts well in this. These people are truly treasures that make life worth living, even when theya re gone.
Thanks so much for entering our contest
Gaylene
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