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Beautiful Abyss

 

 With window open and a full moon’s light
she moves in pleasure that proves delight.
Eyes lock eyes with the touching of skin,
exposing desire wanting within…..

Soft moans fall from her pink glossy lips
whispering secrets told by her hips.
Her breast so full, so round and just right,
he pulls her down, arms holding her tight.

Attention to detail, his tongues on the job
her hand quickly finds his pulsating throb.
Equipped and unzipped she gives the invite
he feels her so wet, so hot and so tight.

He enters heaven with passion as key,
flooded in warmth as her glory flows free.
She caresses his senses and savors his kiss,
he falls freely in this most beautiful abyss.

She arches her back and declares her desire,
he’s at her mercy, consumed by her fire.
Faster and faster the rhythm so sweet,
he feels her tingle from earlobes to feet.

The pressure is building and coming to peak,
floating on waves their bodies go weak.
In his arms she’s shaking in loving embrace,
he’s holding her, tasting her, breathing her grace.

Sweet sounds and expressions beyond all compare,
flash freezing in time this passion they share.
He makes her a promise intended to keep,
and she longs for his arms to rock her to sleep.

With window open and a full moon’s light….
lust turns to love on a magical night.



Author notes

Not really my thing...love poetry or sensual...if thats what this even is, honestly I have no idea, lol. My best attempt at sensual, hope it deosnt come accross as dirty. lol



(seriously) edited 7/08

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  • usefuldistraction
    November 22, 2008
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    Nice write.


  • lilAj
    August 27, 2008
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    goodness!!
    bookmarked.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    July 16, 2008

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    Deliciously enticing writing, we would expect nothing less! Nice rhyming and flowing couplets of a very loving sensual nature!



    Thanks for the entry and please keep coming back in the later rounds
    Jeff and Sue


  • faderman1959
    July 9, 2008
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    Such a special night! This should be read at night with someone special! Beautiful!


  • storiesuntold gold member
    June 30, 2008
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    Beautiful write here

    So true so true a love forever held in memory to embrace the soul


  • NeonRose
    June 27, 2008
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    Awesome writing, Jamie!


  • goat1826
    June 21, 2008
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    Brilliant

    I love this poem
    Great erotica
    Very realistic

  • dillpickle62
    June 21, 2008
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    Stopped By

    To reread my favorite poem by my favorite poet. Ew! This is one poem that jumps starts my day.


    • jamiedoring
      June 21, 2008
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      ..........THIS is your favorite poem of mine ???

      (I never knew!) lol


  • daviscth silver member
    June 15, 2008
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    You did a wonderful job with this.....


  • Rovingone gold member
    June 9, 2008

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    Man, some of us have weak hearts! What a rush. And, that only got an honorable mention? Someone wasn't thinking.


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    March 12, 2008

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    This is a very beautiful piece you have entered here, I like the start the most, it reminds me of those times when you just catch someones eyes and a connection hits straight away.

  • davidwright silver member
    March 8, 2008
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    A nice piece of erotica, brings back precious memories. Did you win the contest Happy trails.

  • Destined4Destruction
    March 6, 2008
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    Been there,done that....wink wink Tard.....Exactly how I remember it.....


  • imperfectperfection
    March 5, 2008

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    Wow

    Your man can definitely not resist this invite ... Not a very big fan of erotica, but girl you've penned steamy hot lines that have captured the sensuality at its peak without any vulgarity... now that's called class... I really really like this one... good luck in the contest, but it seems to me all the way a winner... take care Minoo


  • Preacher
    March 5, 2008

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    What A Turn On

    Really. I've read some erotic books and this is just as good if not better. You should be writing romantic novels.


  • Green Manalishi gold member
    March 5, 2008
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    Just one word for it...

    YOWZA!!!

    Damn, that's good!


  • Abe 1
    March 5, 2008

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    Hot sensual lustful luvin
    luv it
    perfect erotica u did so well
    thanx 4 your entry
    abe


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    March 5, 2008

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    Wowzers!!! A wonderful erotic write here... You've done a fabulous job... definitely stirred my sense!

    Yes, erotica writing is fun indeed

  • dillpickle62
    March 4, 2008

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    Ew! Quick!

    Somebody dial 911 this lady poet just gave me a stroke!
    Hahahahaha.....THIS IS AN AWESOME POEM!!!!
    Ew!

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