I'm trying my best,
But nobody seems to see that.
I come home
With my best work,
But all I hear is
"You can do better."
and
"You're capable of more"
Better than what?!
I'm trying my best.
Capable?
Yeah right.
This is what I can do,
and it's never good enough.
Always looking toward the future,
Yet somehow harping on the past.
What's to come?
Where will this take me in life?
I know I've got to do well
To achieve my dreams.
But if I'm doing my best,
Then how can I be better?
A contest entry
- HELP! HELP! I CAN'T DO IT ALONE! by Tempa Lee.
300 points, ended March 6, 2008, 35 entries
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300 points, ended July 11, 2008, 38 entries
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Comments
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the judge's comment is funny, cuz usually your stuff rhymes. Really really good poem. very emotional and almost desperate, we all feel like that sometimes! good luck and cheer up, you're great!!!
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hey this is Dani the judge....i meant to tell people that i will be a little harsh or close to mean if i don't like what i read. i can really REALLY relate to this but you could have been a winner if this poem rhymed. but you worked it in this here. i liked it because everything i do...just doesn't seem enough. i just stop impressing people because they'll never see what good i can do...only the bad i've done. but good luck.
~Dani~ -
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thanks so much for your input! greatly appreciated.
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